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140583 No. 140583 ID: 995874

A discussion thread for Rotten Apple quest.

https://questden.org/kusaba/quest/res/1067335.html
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No. 140899 ID: 9ea24b
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>>140898
you're most welcome and im honored to have my art in the physical world.

unrelated picture of me eating edmango's face
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No. 141069 ID: dc13c4
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Happy Halloween to everybody who is celebrating it. This will be a possible character that will be a possibility to mean, especially if you go down the overlord path in the quest.
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No. 141232 ID: dc13c4
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>>140899
Bobbie: "You really don't need to do all of that to show your honor...I don't know how I even feel about it."

Abdle: "Speak for yourself, I am really enjoying this feast. Look at him go, such passion, such raw emotions!"
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No. 141233 ID: dc13c4
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Bobbie: "Oh my boss has something that I need to do."
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No. 141234 ID: dc13c4
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Bobbie: "I am sorry to cut this demonstration short but I need to read this announcement."

Abdle: "Aww your no fun Bobbie."
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No. 141235 ID: dc13c4
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Bobbie: "According to this there is going to be a survey that is primarily for all the participants of the Rotten Apple Quest. But even those who read the quest are free to fill it up if they are so inclined."
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No. 141236 ID: dc13c4
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No. 141237 ID: a8430b

Quepstion 1, my answer is 6, like the story and the characters but I still think that there can be some improvements.

Question 2, my answer is 8, I am interested in seeing where the story will go.

Question 3, my answer is 3, it felt like the battle was dragging a little bit.

Question 4, my answer is 7, enjoyed the mechanics of the battle system.

Question 5, my answer is 5, interaction during the fight felt a little bit odd in some parts.

Question 6, my answer is 5, to me it felt like 50-50 when it came to my suggestions.

Question 7, my answer is 8, I felt like I did contribute to the victory of the battle.

Question 8, my answer is 4, overall at the end it felt a little bit forced.
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No. 141257 ID: c51648

1) Going with 6. Wouldn't say it's among my favs, still it beats the pants off of many quests. Which may change as the stakes go up as that engages. Just don't let them get high too fast/slow.
2) Uh... will go with 6. Like the premise though every once in a while there's moments we don't know a thing that would be obvious to the people of this place. Like that magic plague that was actually illusions. Or that Abdle can cause harm unlike Bobbie.
3) Lol typo. 1 is too short 8 is too short lol. Feels like heads I win tails you lose. Seriously though. Guessing 8 is too long so going with 6. Did drag a bit though most things felt like they had to happen so... hard to say what to remove.
4) Will go with 7. Funnily enough the mechanics felt opaque but that was no issue. Felt less game-ish to have the mechanics less obvious. Sure the patience bar was good, however that was practically need-to-know. Only complaint is... well, we'll get to that but not on this.
5) Will go with 5. Would be higher but for one big issue. We had practically decided to give up 5 gobbos to resolve this without fighting. Still, Bobbie just *had* to lose her sense and ruin it all. Felt railroaded.
6) 8. Did help that Polt saw and often backed my ingenious plans.
7) 7. However that -1 is on myself, since a few ingenious plans went sideways. Friggin' Orbital messed up my masterstroke of poison gas...
8) 3. Here's where the issue from #4 shows up. Dude convinces himself it's an illusion so hard yet gives up that conviction as soon as the gas dissipates? He kills the rebels but spares the one who instigated? Just felt off.
Oh, question for yourself. Stayed unnamed but ID changed because of rotating VPN so. Would a name help parse suggestions or is it fine as is?
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No. 141268 ID: e51896

1. a 6 so far. I like this silly moments on this quest, and the idea of trying to triumph over your foes through initimidation and negotiation alone while being weak is pretty unique.

2. a 7. I like the characters and humor, and puzzles

3. a 6-7. it kinda dragged on a bit, tho, like >>141257 said, it felt like those had to happen. I think for a first fight, it could of ended 2-3 updates ago. maybe this length for this battle could have been a bit better for a later fight. I say for the next encounter, make it a bit shorter, but as we encounter stronger enemies later on, slowly make the battles a little longer

4. a 7. the multiple choices helped out quite a bit to give us ideas of what to do, while allowing us to come up with our own ideas. I like how towards the end, we were on our own. trying to figure out what to do based off of what weaknesses we found from the enemy throughout the fight to finish him off

5. 6, a little railroaded at times

6. since this is a multiple choice, and the suggestions chosen are based off of votes, this might be something more of us hearing each other more than you hearing us, so probably don't worry too much about it. That said, around a 7. though if you're worried that your suggestors are feeling like they aren't being heard, maybe from time to time you can acknowledge the spirits that choice didn't get chosen (not all the time, just sometimes)

7. 8. good work team

8. same reasons as the above suggestions. I think part of the reason why it felt forced and weird was because the middle part dragged on a bit, and you wanted to end it by rushing the ending instead of easing towards the ending.

overall, I say a 7/10 quest so far. there's improvements that are needed, but it has potential. I'm looking forward to see how it'll improve.
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No. 141271 ID: dc13c4
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Bobbie: "Thank you all for filling up the survey, Absurdity DeVoid has given me a written statement after a long consideration of all the answers that you submitted."
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No. 141272 ID: dc13c4
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Bobbie: "Also I will give my own thoughts after I finish reading this on how things played out, from my perspective."

Abdle: "Yeah I will chime in as well and give my own thoughts as well."
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No. 141273 ID: dc13c4
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141273

Bobbie: "Alright let's start with the letter. Greetings and thank you for participating in the survey and for following the story so far, it means a lot to me that my story is captivating you all and that you are still following it. My goal is to make my every quest feel like a completely different story. Now first things first, I want to explain some things that weren't clear because of my bad art, during the battle, nobody died all the ones who disobeyed Ramming Rage just got beaten up but they are all alive. Now on the topic of Bobbie flying off the handle, I know that two suggestions were up for that idea of giving up 5 goblins, but Poltergeist Ethanoic Acid really didn't like that idea so he contacted Harbard Grim in order to push his idea of not doing that. So it was two for giving the goblins and two against doing so and I went with Poltergeist's suggestion, he and Harbard Grim were my friends for some time and their decision was what won in the end. As for the poison gas not working, true it failed but at the same time you got something out of it Orbital was introduced and you even got a chance of getting him as your ally. As for the nameless participator, I would appreciate it if you named yourself. It is primarily so that I could eassaly see when somebody has posted in that quest, but if you are not up for it I won't force you."
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No. 141274 ID: dc13c4
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Bobbie: "Now on the things that I do agree with you all, the pacing felt off and I do feel it dragged on and at the end, it feels like it was rushed out with its conclusion I will try to do better, respect more options during battle and other suggestions in the next part where your opponent will be a brave and fearless hero."
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No. 141275 ID: dc13c4
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Bobbie: "Well that is all written on the piece of paper, so might as well tell how I see things played out..."
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No. 141276 ID: dc13c4
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Bobbie: "During the whole battle it was about scaring your opponent with the knife trick. When I pierced his body and the knife I played with the idea of doing somthing to him while he was slowly freaking out..."
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No. 141277 ID: dc13c4
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Bobbie: "When the knife was properly hidden that is when I started to threaten him that the knife was still inside his body and that I could make it corporeal which would kill him instantly."
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No. 141278 ID: dc13c4
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141278

Bobbie: "I do have to admit the interactions were clunky and unclear at the moment and there is a lot of improvement that can be done for the whole battle system."

Abdle: "I mean when even the creator asks you do you feel the outcomes were believable that is a sign that maybe he didn't."
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No. 141284 ID: 004436

>he and Harbard Grim were my friends for some time and their decision was what won in the end.
So it was nepotism that won that one. Seriously though, was unaware of Harbard Grim getting involved so that does feel less out of nowhere.
>As for the poison gas not working, true it failed but at the same time you got something out of it Orbital was introduced and you even got a chance of getting him as your ally.
Just to be clear that was not supposed to be a negative on your side. Even the best plans can go sideways so it was a positive. Supposed to be because strategic skills can always be improved. Just tend to focus on where things can be improved even if my side wins. Focusing on success gives overconfidence. Which rage learned himself as he was overconfident with his shield's defenses.
>would appreciate it if you named yourself
Let's see, what is suitably pompous given Abdle's offer of royal advisor status... Grand Marshal it is!
>"When the knife was properly hidden that is when I started to threaten him that the knife was still inside his body and that I could make it corporeal which would kill him instantly."
Still feels off given we earlier poked obvious holes in his idea of it all being an illusion which just convinced him it was a mass illusion so he really seemed to believe he was fooled. Just feels odd that threats and dissipated gas broke that while obvious holes failed. Guess he was just blustering?
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No. 141321 ID: dc13c4
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141321

Absurdity DeVoid: "I am glad that you name yourself it really suits you. Also, I liked your input during the survey it's a really solid constructive criticism that I will take into consideration."
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No. 141322 ID: dc13c4
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Absurdity DeVoid: "The thing that I really need to work on is making the whole story feel less game-like, maybe removing the whole meter mechanic along with the pacing. I also feel like the ending was strange."
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No. 141323 ID: dc13c4
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Absurdity DeVoid: "The thing that I am most glad about is how this reboot of the quest feels much more structured than the previous attempt that I made with the story. As for your participation so far I would like to offer you a prize that one of my characters will present to you."
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No. 141324 ID: dc13c4
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Gramlera: "Whatever you Grand Marshal are interested in Absurdity will draw it for you, so just say it and it will be done."
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No. 141325 ID: dc13c4
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141325

Absurdity DeVoid: "I just have to warn you that when it comes to my drawing potential there are some limitations of the skill-biased variety. But I will still try to draw it anyway."
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No. 141356 ID: 1b29ae
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141356

Well in quest we can't be fancy but this place? Won't make it too tough. Just a lesser demon without headspikes and wearing modern dress uniform for militaries. With hat and medals of course. Pants optional because no legs. Stupidly excessive pompous number of medals optional as well, pic related. Even color is optional.
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No. 141361 ID: dc13c4
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141361

>>141356

I hope you like it
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No. 141362 ID: dcefc3

Can you my lesser demon dressed up as a centurion
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No. 141363 ID: e51896

>>141273
I apologize for getting another person involved there. It was really wrong of me and disrespectful to do. I'll learn from this mistake For the future and be more thoughtful of my actions.

>>141325

I prefer my lesser demon just the way he is, thanks. My decision might change, but for now this is what I want.
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No. 141367 ID: dc13c4
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>>141362

Here you go, as for you Poltergeist no need to apologize the way I see it your determination was greater at that moment. Also, it is unfortunate but in the discussion thread because your character is the only one who isn't wearing anything your lesser demon is canonically a nudist I am not the one to make the rules that is just how it works.
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No. 141375 ID: 994b83

>>141361
>ribbons AND epaulets
Fits very well the obnoxiously overdecorated thing. Especially since usually ribbons and medals are mutually exclusive. So ya dun gud DeVoid.
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No. 141378 ID: 00e23d
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141378

Did a sloppy coloring job for funsies. Did mostly red/green/yellow because apple colors. Should the laziness subside, perhaps getting GIMP will lead to a less sloppy one.
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No. 141387 ID: dc13c4
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141387

Bobbie: "Wow I didn't know that you also knew how to use digital art painting."

Abdle: "What was this done while you were drunk or is it me?"
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No. 141388 ID: dc13c4
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141388

Bobbie: "That is not nice to say to the Grand Marshal."

Abdle: "I am being honest I drank so much alcohol that everything I see is blurry"
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No. 141443 ID: dc13c4
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Bobbie: "Well once again it is that time of the year when the holidays start and the year is nearing its conclusion. For all participators of the quest I wish you the best in the new year and happy holidays if you are celebrating any!"

Abdle: "Ding ding ding, we have an announcement. Before the year is over we have somthing special planned, somthing tailored to one specific individual."
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No. 141444 ID: dc13c4
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Abdle: "It is going to be a surprise and a trip down memory lane. So for one of you, there is something coming towards you."
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No. 141488 ID: dc13c4
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Absurdity DeVoid: "Well I managed to finish this just before the year ended, a monument to a quest that I loved following, so I just wanted to reminisce about it. So Poltergeist Ethanoic Acid this is the gift that I was working on, happy new year."
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No. 141536 ID: dc13c4
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Absurdity DeVoid: "This is fanart to the newcomer who started following the Rotten Apple quest."
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No. 141557 ID: dcefc3

So in the latest update you showed all the previous heroes. So what happened to all of them after the conflict was over?
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No. 141559 ID: dc13c4
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141559

To be honest the backstory of the previous battles was mealy there to flash out the claim that the queen has overcome on her way to growth. I really don't know if these characters will ever appear in the story but at the same time that practically leaves their fate to your imagination. So let's make it official, what do you want their fate to be?
A) They are terrified of their experience with Bobbie.
B) They didn't survive after the battle with Bobbie.
C) They were tricked by Bobbie but they don't fear her.
D) Other suggestions.

Additional question which one of these previous opponents do you find interesting and would you like to see once again to appear in the story?
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No. 141560 ID: 5ebd37

Genocider: A, For a being powered by hate to be tricked seems like Bobbie must have given it an existential crisis.
Clara: C, I like her design, it would be neat if she ended up on Bobbie's side. The "fallen" paladin that realizes their order is wrong and monsters aren't so bad is always a fun story trope.
Right Hand:B
Left Hand:C, It would be funny if just the one hand came looking for revenge.
Beard:A
Covario:C, This one's fight seems to have left unresolved trauma, I wouldn't be surprised if they showed up again to bring closure.
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No. 141561 ID: dcefc3

For Goblin Genocider I am going with C). To me he seemed like a immovable force, so just point it in a different direction and you win. For Clara I am going with A) or B), I don't find that character interesting. For the beard, right and left hands I go with A) for all of then. For Covario B), even if he is dead he left his nark on others.
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No. 141563 ID: dc13c4
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141563

Goblin Genocider has one point in A and one point in C.

Paladin Clara has half a point for A and B, full points for C and to be seen again.

The right hand of Nefleus has one A and B points.

The Living Beard has two points in A.

The left hand of Nefleus has one point in A and C.

Covario has one point in B, C and to be seen again.
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No. 141570 ID: dcefc3

I forgot to vote who I would like to see once again in the quest and my answer is the Goblin Genocider, he gives the overpowered boss at the start of the game one that you can't beat uder-leveled. So a reamatch with him would be interesting to see.
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No. 141576 ID: dc13c4
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141576

Here is the update for the update for the additional wish for the Goblin Genocider to be seen again in the quest. This is an addition to the previous suggestions.
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No. 141577 ID: 27fceb
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141577

Here is a fanart of your character
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No. 141598 ID: dc13c4
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No. 141599 ID: dc13c4
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Absurdity DeVoid: "I really appreciate your fanart of the queen and the demonic apple let me try to touch it up a little bit."
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No. 141600 ID: dc13c4
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Absurdity DeVoid: "And to add more color to it."
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No. 141601 ID: dc13c4
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141601

Bobbie: "Wow the colored one looks impressive, we might use it in a story like a portrait of us."

Abdle: "I would wish it also had my crown in it."

Bobbie: "Do you have to always be so grumpy about everything?"
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No. 141602 ID: dc13c4
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141602

Bobbie: "Oh we also got a sketch of our castle."

Abdle: "Yeah that can be helpful."

Bobbie: "Thank you Nalther for creating this for me."
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No. 141604 ID: dc13c4
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Absurdity DeVoid: "Just doing a fanart of Magical School Of Treachery. Now Derklord can you see this as bribery? Sure you can see it that way. But I like to see it more as me appreciating your cameo."
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No. 141605 ID: dc13c4

>>141604


Absurdity DeVoid: "Also have to apologize if this art of these characters isn't biblically accurate."
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No. 141623 ID: dc13c4
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141623

Bobbie: "Congratulations on finishing the first part of Rotten Apple Monster Queen Quest! It took some time but it was completed, maybe the quest will continue after a short break."

Abdle: "Yeah we earn it after so many days of updates, but before we finish our celebration we need to read the message that Absurdity has given to us."
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No. 141624 ID: dc13c4
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Bobbie: "As a prize for following the quest and participating in it all you can submit your ideas for the characters, and give a short or long summary of it. Or a drawing, I will draw it in my art style and implement it in the story. Have fun and be creative if you want to make a character for the quest."
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No. 141625 ID: 27fceb

My idea for the character would be a human executor who first was part of the Head Splitters and later joined the Banisters. When he abandoned the second faction he ended up in the forgotten kingdom just chopping wood not loyal no one. So my idea is for him to become another ally to the Monster Queen.
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No. 141627 ID: dc13c4
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141627

Interesting idea, as for how this character would look is it alright with you if I reuse one of my ideas for an abandoned quest story that I never did? For the look, it would be the stereotypical medieval executor look. So what do you think, does this fit your idea for that character?
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No. 141630 ID: 5ebd37
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141630

A kenku scholar on the trail of a conspiracy/prophecy. It started as just an excuse to go on a trip, but now they're horribly worried its actually true.
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No. 141632 ID: dc13c4
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141632

I really like this character and I already have an idea where I can use him. Here is how looks in my art style without and with colors. So what is your opinion on it? As for the executor, what would be his name?
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No. 141633 ID: b7022b

Generous offer but will have to politely decline a fleshed out being. Orbital was a surprise. Even though it was bad, quite like being surprised. Plot twists are so much sweeter if you have a few pieces of the puzzle but not enough to see the whole picture. Perhaps a concept would suffice though. Vague enough to still be unsure. Was worried about a secret test of character before. Just having the possibility will constantly challenge. How do we know if we're tested or if we waste resources on a red herring? Perhaps not having one would be the twist itself. With that level of ambiguity it will still be tough without spoiling what may yet be.
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No. 141634 ID: 27fceb

I completely forgot to give my character a name. Well let's go with his profession being his name. It isn't that he doesn't have a name but rather that he doesn't care about it. As for his appearance yeah that will do, that will do, also one running joke with him is that his face never gets revealed.
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No. 141635 ID: 5ebd37

They look great, blue suits them
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No. 141636 ID: dc13c4
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Absurdity DeVoid: "First of all I understand if you Grand Marshal are not interested in creating character, those who will we meet later on. This whole thing is primarily a reference to the quest that I followed where the quest author asked me to create characters for his quest at the star of it. On the topic of red herring, well if this is about the battles, every opponent will have a different way how they demonstrate strength and the job of the queen will be to dismantle that. Maybe some will use red herrings in their strategy or we will do that against them. As for our executioner, his official name will be Executioner I just want to remind you that you have chosen this. And finally Nalthar, I am glad that you like how I colored your character."
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No. 141637 ID: c77d55

Slight misunderstanding. Whole red herring thing was for secret tests of character so we would never be sure if we face an actual one. Still, good to know. Will expect the unexpected.
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No. 141642 ID: dc13c4
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141642

I apologize for not understanding what you asked me. But at the same time, I gave you something else to think about.
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No. 141643 ID: dc13c4
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141643

As for your real question, well there won't be as much as secret skill checks as there were in the Long live the Queen game. But at the same time, there are going to be some things that your opponents will expect from you and will be able to counter your attempts.
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No. 141659 ID: e51896
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141659

Okay, my idea for a character.

A mysterious pig vampire showed up to this world, looking to set up a fast food restaurant chain called "BURGERVANIA" within the different kingdoms of the world. Apparently, the BURGERVANIA chain did not originate from this world, but from another world entirely, and they want to expand their burger empire throughout the different universes out there after making some kind of deal with a demon from another world to help them do it, and BURGERVANIA chose the world of rotten apple as one of the many worlds to expand their business.

This pig is name Vance, and while he isn't the true owner of BURGERVANIA, he was sent here by the head CEO to spread the business to this world, and act as this world's BURGERVANIA's CEO

He is neutral and will not pick sides, as he is willing to not only expand to Bobbie's kingdom, but to the other kingdoms, including her enemies' kingdoms. Perhaps he will try to work out a deal with Bobbie to allow him to purchase some places to set up some BURGERVANIA restaurants in her kingdom and villages.

Since he's a vampire, he can only be around during the night.

No, he does not personally know w2K and they are not related. They have never met before. He only knows her as a mascot, which they will probably use her image to try to help sell their food.
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No. 141696 ID: c65153
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141696

So since there was a parody of my characters in the quest and they described it as an anime in the story I decided to create the anime cover art of the parody.
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No. 141709 ID: 55f601
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First of all, I want to thank everyone for sending their ideas for characters, it was fun thinking about how to implement them all in the story. Now about Vance, he is a clear connection to the other quest and I don't have a problem with that. But what I want to change a little bit is how he ended up in this world, instead of coming here it will be that he is stranded in this world and needs to create his food chain from scratch. I imagine him to act like Ray Kroc from the Founder movie.
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No. 141770 ID: e7a0ae
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141770

So worst or best typo?
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No. 141785 ID: 72574f
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141785

Absurdity DeVoid: "Oh how embarrassing for me to make such a silly mistake, yeah it was supposed to be sit instead of shit."
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No. 141786 ID: 72574f
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141786

Absurdity DeVoid: "But at the same time I find it really funny. Also, I have been thinking of making a comic of Rotten Apple characters singing songs how do you all feel about that idea."
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No. 141790 ID: 9c23e7

Won't lie, see lots of typos but usually it's easy to know what it's supposed to be. Had to highlight that one for the humor value, though. Did consider leaving in Wormworks saying it's fine and naming the png "Wormworks_has_a_fetish.png" but it seemed funny enough as is since he's smiling. Per the comic do it if it's fun for you chief. We are but humble readers/suggestors. Ours is to positively criticize. We'd be very entitled if we tell you how to do fun things.
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No. 141813 ID: e002ad
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141813

Absurdity DeVoid: "What I can say for my defense is that I usually want to make the update as soon as possible, I work alone but things slip by me."
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141814

Absurdity DeVoid: "Despite all my grammatical mistakes and unimpressive art I am glad that the story captivated you."
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No. 141815 ID: 52a42d

Didn't mean to make ya feel bad. Just happen to notice typos in daily life. Were it a deal-breaker would probably never read words at all. Oh and while digital coloring and perhaps shading is not that tough, line art is my kryptonite. So however unimpressive you believe your art is, you're still better than like 80% of people who have no art skill at all. Plus most artists improve the more they draw. Especially if they criticize their own works. So chin up as they say in British derived dialects!
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No. 141818 ID: 0f6712

>>141815
It is alright, do you have a discord? We can talk there.
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No. 141826 ID: bcde53

>>141818
Short version: no. Long version: technological affinity has made me a technophobe because of privacy concerns. Little ironic eh? Still, while a level of tracking is very hard to avoid in this day and age, giving up and letting it be easy just seems foolish.

However if retro works, just joined IRC at #tgchan on irc.rizon.net even if it's semi-dead.
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No. 141828 ID: 711344

I completely understand your approach to interacting with technology, in today's day and age anything that you say or do on the internet it will be recorded and monitored. I will respect your decision and not ask you anymore about Discord.
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Bobbie: "Well for today's celebration put in all the jokes that you liked or would like to see in this quest."

Abdle: "Are you sure that is going to be such a good idea, you do realize what people on this site find funny."
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Bobbie: "Oh I am fully aware and in a way am accepting of it."
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No. 141972 ID: 27fceb

I like the joke of Bobbie being tired of everybody's nonsense.
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No. 141976 ID: 5ebd37

Abdle's little toy friend is a good joke
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No. 141977 ID: 5ebd37
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a travel poster for the castle
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No. 141989 ID: 7c55ad

I like Bobbie's small silly moments especially when it contrasts with her personality (like that cringey dab she did)
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141994

Bobbie: "I asked for your favorite joke and now you just created a joke that I really like. you definitely outplayed me during this celebration, I can assure you that this travel poster will become a part of the quest."
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Bobbie: "As for your other suggestion all of them will be taken into consideration and it will be sprinkled them here and there in the quest. Not trying to overdo it."
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Bobbie: "And yes this also includes Abdle's little toy friend joke as well."

Abdle: "Oh joy..."
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No. 142050 ID: 27fceb

So what's up with the heart point that we just got?
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No. 142053 ID: 4c9b0e
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It is a reference to relationships standing with other characters. The more points you have the more they will see you in a favorable light, there will be all sorts of them as the quest goes along. I will give you some for the characters that you already know exist.

1. belongs to the Archer.

2. belongs to Worm Works.

3. belongs to the whole Farm Knights Gang.
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Just something for later. I was asked to help make a special monster by Absurdity, so this is what I came up with. Don't read if you don't want spoilers.

They are an Oblex, a special type of Ooze that can change its appearance based on the memories of people it's eaten. As such, they are something of a scholar and librarian but everything they do is an imitation of actual feelings. There is always something just slightly off about them, and when they get too stressed out, panicked, etc, they return to their slime form.
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142094

Harbard Grim is the one who picked which one of these 5 character is the Oblex and it will be up to you all to figure out who that is.
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No. 142162 ID: c5529d

I think at this moment, the reason why I'm thinking we shouldn't take the gift is because I believe the demon kid when he said that he didn't use any illusions to trick us. So if it isn't him, it's one of the others. And right now, I'm thinking it's probably Scarecrow Kid who tried to mess with us, considering he was likely staring directly at one of the lesser demons, which isn't normal. I might be a bit too paranoid, but right now, I think that gift might actually be something that could mess with us later down the line if we accept it, especially if he was the one who was causing illusions on the demon kid's arms to mess with us earlier.
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No. 142163 ID: c5529d

>>142162
Also posted this here in case Scarecrow Kid can hear us. If he can see us, he can probably hear us too.
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No. 142164 ID: 27fceb

What if not taking his gift may just anger him.
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No. 142165 ID: c5529d

Perhaps. But it's better than just breaking it in front of him as the other other option. Pretty much why in my decision, I made it a polite decline to not hurt his feelings by saying it's too valuable to just accept, and to keep it with him for later. Can't forget that one of them is the Oblex after all >>142094
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Fan Art for the House Cadvere quest which was made by Nalthar

https://questden.org/kusaba/quest/res/1080954.html
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No. 142363 ID: 5ebd37

I think we can use the cat's cleverness against her

Step one: Bobbie carries decoy toy around in place of the real Abdle, with a good but not perfect disguise. Shadow Taker will see through this deception and know Abdle is hidden somewhere, but she will think that we think we fooled her.
Step two: Abdle is hidden in a chamber that is rigged as a trap. Something where when the thief enters she will get dropped in a pit or a cage falls on her. Better yet, have the hallway leading to the room be trapped, so when she opens the door at one end the other end gets sealed shut. She may be tricky, but I bet she isn't carrying a big drill or bomb able to get through a solid stone dungeon.
Bonus deception: Abdle isn't even in the trap room, but a set of arranged mirror's make it look like he is. Something like one of those boxy periscopes. This way even if ST tries to yoink him with a trick bolt he'll be quite unreachable. or at least give him time to escape hatch if she has something we didn't anticipate.
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No. 142555 ID: e25c20

Thank you for following the quest so far we reached the half-point of the second chapter so it is a good point for a short survey. How do you like the story so far, is there something more that you would like to see and if you have to add some constructive criticism I will consider it.
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No. 142558 ID: c5529d

>How do you like the story so far
it's engaging. I like the comedic moments

>is there something more that you would like to see
I'm interested in seeing how the characters develop in the story

>if you have to add some constructive criticism I will consider it.
There's spelling errors from time to time, but I think it still gets the message across regardless. If you want, you can probably write out the script in a word document for it to correct any errors before writing it in the picture if that helps.
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