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109181 No. 109181 ID: cc08c7

In which we talk about a bird dealing with inordinate amounts of stress and mind warping horrors.

Critique and tips appreciated.
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No. 110361 ID: cc08c7

>>110359
If three people say fight after a turn she'll fight once, which is what I just said she'd do. I literally tallied all of the votes and then did them in order from most votes (which was Talk) to least (Which was Item). She won't attack three turns in a row unless people keep voting for nothing but attack once a turn is over. The way combat works now is so I can react to as many replies as I get as possible and keep the fight moving.
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No. 110363 ID: cc08c7

>>110361
I also did what I did tonight to showcase what each option did since someone voted for each, and try to get an update out after 10 days of inactivity. This is also still the first attempt at combat and I'm trying to work all the bugs out, so I want to at least give it a chance before outright removing it.
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No. 110365 ID: 79a07e

>>110361
>>110363

I think the concern here is simple. Say a slight majority of people vote for option A for one reason, and another group vote option B for an entirely different reason. Option B is second, but the people who voted option A point out that Option B has a higher chance of backfiring than option A, and in a worse way- high risk high reward, basically. Option B voters feel it's worth it, Option A voters don't.

*IF* I'm understanding this correctly, then basically Options A's concerns are entirely dismissed under this voting system, since there's a high chance that regardless we'd have to deal with the risks present in Option B, which Option A voters wanted to avoid. This is (NOT INTENTIONALLY) discarding players' concerns in an unfair manner- I could see such a system being gamed so that even if a good option is in the lead, an unknown or likely negative option could gain groundswell and nullify the good option's results.

That's how I figure it, anyway.
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No. 110369 ID: 9876c4

I ad a serious giggle m8, when I found out Charlotte's melee default is a CROWbar.

This is all.
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No. 110371 ID: cc08c7

>>110365

If an option chosen is the seriously wrong one then I'm not going to outright kill people over it, at least not yet. Eventually though there will be punishments for messing up, in AND out of battles.

I don't want to handhold people through this or look like I'm outright ignoring people, hence the voting system right now. Like I said I mostly did it this way tonight because I needed to at least show what each thing did and I figured that explaining how it worked while it was happening would make it easier to plan ahead.

In regards to people voting for wrong choices I can't really fix that, it happens in other Quests all the time and if I think people are either rigging, choosing the obviously wrong answer to goof around or whatever then I'll intervene, but right now I'm trusting you guys to play nice. That's the interactive part right now. It's possible to screw up so you guys will need to play smart, and this thread is more than appropriate to use for discussing how not to get killed. That's what this is for, aside from like, just talking about the Quest in general.

I'll try to figure out how to fix the combat system as things go on, but right now I'm stuck between the problem of railroading by only choosing the right decisions or risking a potential loss scenario with the current system. If anyone has suggestions on how to improve it while avoiding both of these problems please tell me so I can try to fix it. I'm more than open to suggestions to improve.

>>110369
The saddest part is I can't remember if I chose that for the pun or not.
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No. 110373 ID: b4a23c

>>110371
>I'm trusting you guys to play nice.
>you guys will need to play smart,

I'm not even beibg memetastic when I say that your faith may be somewhat misplaced.
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No. 110386 ID: 398fe1

>>110358
My problem with this is that even if a hundred people vote Fight, and three other people vote talk, item, defend each... you just have her fight on the first turn, then defend, talk, item. Wasting half her turns, most likely. I mean, in this battle, Fight and Defend appear to be the only useful commands. If this is meant to be a tutorial, we can reasonably expect that to be the case for all battles.

Assigning turn priority based on percentage of voting only makes sense if she has to use all four commands in a sequence of four turns. Since turn order matters, it's also incredibly difficult to set up the fight properly. You'd need 10 votes just to have a 4-3-2-1 split, and everyone would have to vote exactly correctly. The turn order would be easily sabotaged by a mere two suggesters, and let me tell you, there are definitely more than two people on tgchan who like to sabotage quests. Heck, it just takes one traitor to cause a tie, and you didn't mention how ties are resolved.

I suggest you take the vote in a different way: ask suggesters to submit a sequence of commands. Then pick the most popular sequence.
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No. 110388 ID: 398fe1

>>110386
Oh I guess it could be 6 votes with a 3-2-1-0 split. Still more than a lot of quests get.
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No. 110620 ID: cc08c7

Alright, gonna try to update next week if I can. Something came up (that something being Persona 5) and I've been busy (playing Persona 5). Sorry for the serious delay.
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No. 110651 ID: e01e87

>>110361

That's... better, but I still think it's not such a good idea to have her fight, then ignore all responses to that until you've spent another three turns drawing her choosing defend, talk, and item in that order. Just have her fight, and discard the other three commands. Then after you posted the results of her fighting, take another vote from responses that follow.

Otherwise there's always gonna be that one guy who votes for the least popular action every time, just to force you to waste a turn on it.
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No. 111649 ID: cc08c7

Shit uh, it's been a while. I'm not gonna make any excuses, I dropped the ball hard and haven't updated in forever and I know I really should have. I'll try really hard to update this week and at least get through the rest of the first part. I'm really really sorry.
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No. 111653 ID: 143250

>>111649
No sweat. Life happens.
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No. 111656 ID: 3ce125

>>111649
Updating regularly is a skill you can learn. Keep trying!
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No. 113155 ID: cc08c7

Holy shit. We're back folks.
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No. 113158 ID: ca0e20

>>113155
Alright! More cute birds! =D
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No. 113160 ID: cc08c7

>>113158
Hopefully I can continue the cute birbing more often after the current fight is finally done. I think in the future I'll handle battles differently depending on what kind of boss she fights.
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No. 113168 ID: 7b95d9

...I still think part of this is outside influence. Some things just don't add up.
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No. 114295 ID: ca0e20

Do you have another spot where you post your art? =3
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No. 114296 ID: 36de2e

>>114295

I've been trying to post more stuff to my Tumblr lately. I kinda consider the drawthread my "main" spot for Art but Tumblr's gotten more recently.

http://chillyjackal.tumblr.com/
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No. 114298 ID: ca0e20

>>114296
Oh dang, I didn't realize that you had the drawthread with that one title card with the rabbit, lol. I might follow that since it seems more centered around your art. =P
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No. 114854 ID: 36de2e

Going to attempt updating again tomorrow, we're basically done the Prologue and we'll be heading into the first chapter soon. I just don't know if I should make a new thread for it now or after the first chapter is completed.
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No. 114984 ID: 36de2e

Okay so, life update and a kinda explanation.
I went to an eye doctor yesterday and found out my eyes are damaged by my Type-1 Diabetes, so I need to see a specialist to try to fix the damage and possibly reverse it. I also have to start taking better care of myself and my blood sugars.

I don't know if this will really effect the slow Quest updates but I'm going to be going through some life changes and thought it was fair to warn you guys in advance. The Quest isn't on hiatus or anything, I'm just figuring out my shit and trying to get my life together before things get worse.

Basically I've been under a lot of stress lately and the Quest stuff has kinda been put to the side. I will try to update as soon as I feel the urge again and I'm really really sorry.
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No. 114993 ID: 3ce125

>>114984
That really sucks, and a harsh lesson on the dangers of diabetes. I hope it's reversible.
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No. 114994 ID: ca0e20

>>114984
Ah, sure hope things works out for the best!
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No. 115182 ID: 36de2e

OKAY SO GOOD NEWS I GUESS? Went to a specialist on Friday and apparently my eyes might not be as bad as the first doctor said. We're still going through with the plan to get healthier though, but I thought it'd be fair to update you guys on it. They also took photos of the inside of my eyes that the doctor will be looking at on the 18th. I'll try to update sometime this week hopefully, and I want to thank you guys again for being patient with me.
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No. 115375 ID: 9be73b

>She can now combat the creatures of the other world
>'other world'
>not 'her mind'

I actually don't want the qm to confirm or deny this just yet. I want to feel clever for just a little bit longer. Just wanted to point it out.
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No. 115387 ID: 36de2e

>>115375

By the next chapter what's "going on" will be explained more.
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No. 115388 ID: 91ee5f

I like the fact that under that sweater, Charlotte is an EXTRA THICC birb! XD
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No. 115389 ID: 36de2e

So, with the next chapter I'm wondering if I should stick to the original style of the Quest (The little cut and paste characters on simple backgrounds) or if I should try doing full anthro pictures like I've been doing with Beach Day/Chest Day stuff. Critique/advice is more than welcome.
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No. 115390 ID: 9be73b

>>115389
Id say keep the cut and paste for normal questing, full anthro for EPIC BOSS FIGHTS. Or general AWESOME actions.
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No. 115391 ID: ba506f

>>115389
you could do both, with the cut out style used for fight scenes to kinda give it an RPG feel, or you could use the more cutesy cut out style for less intense or "cute" moments and have the full pictures for more serious or action pack moments... Or if you don't mind me throwing one more idea in your face you could use one style when we're in the "real" world and the other while in the "dream" world to help with the surreal feel.
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No. 115392 ID: 91ee5f

>>115391
>Or if you don't mind me throwing one more idea in your face you could use one style when we're in the "real" world and the other while in the "dream" world to help with the surreal feel.
That sounds good!

I think full anthro characters would fit in best in the "real world", while in the "other world" the cut and paste characters would fit in there!
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No. 115393 ID: 91ee5f

>>115392
Kinda like how the in "real world" Charlotte normally sees herself as full anthro, while in the "other world" she sees herself all tiny and afraid, since the cut and paste has all been tiny characters.
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No. 115397 ID: ca0e20

Yeah, since it's similar to how I do it, I was gonna suggest doing anthros for "important scenes", which can range from the scene being important for the story/character or even if it's cuter/funnier that way. Keeping the copy paste for faster updates.

But the already suggested realworld/dreamworld is a neat concept.

I guess I'd add that you can do both. Have a copy paste anthro and copy paste small cute for the world difference, but also draw out important scenes. You can still draw out important scenes with the smaller Charlotte when she's in the dreamworld.

Also I should draw Charlotte proper one of these days. Not just the side of her head. =P
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No. 115398 ID: 4854ef

While that does seem like a good idea, it'd make it noticeable to us if something suddenly jars to the dream world or anthro world given the amount of mind-screw that's been going on.
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No. 115399 ID: ca0e20

>>115398
Doesn't have to be a hard rule. It can just be an unwritten rule that can be exploited and broken later.
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No. 115400 ID: 3ae33e

>>115398
Doesn't have to be a hard rule, could just have it be what realm she thinks she's in. For example if she's in the dream world but still think she's awake it will stay in the real world style until she figures out she's dreaming and could also have it if she sees something weird or to many weird things she'll start to think she's dream causing an art shift even though she's still in the waking world
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No. 115473 ID: 36de2e
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115473

Posting some "concept art" I guess for an upcoming character.
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No. 115863 ID: 36de2e

Health Update: Went back to eye doctor and got some laser work done to help stop the bleeding in my eyes (Which hurt like fucking hell and left me sore into today) and there's going to be more treatments to help deal with my problems. Not sure when I'm going to start the next part of the Quest but just wanted to update on what was going on.
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No. 115880 ID: ae9b99

Don't push yourself. Take all the time you need.
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No. 115886 ID: 91ee5f

>>115880
I agree!

Your health is more important than our entertainment!
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No. 115887 ID: 9876c4

If our entertainment concerns you, please know that I am entertained by, and fully support you not bleeding from your eyes.
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No. 116162 ID: 36de2e

Update: Still dealing with health stuff. If things calm down over the next week I'll try to update again. Thanks for all the support and understanding while I try to get my shit together.
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No. 116262 ID: fd7d8f

>>116162
Don't let your anxiety get to you, get well soon!
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No. 119083 ID: 36de2e

Quick update thing, I'm not dead or anything, just been busy and trying to find the drive to do this again. I'm hoping to start a new thread sometime right after Christmas.
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No. 119085 ID: 91ee5f

>>119083
Yay!
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No. 119089 ID: 4324ce

>>119083
Fantabulous.
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No. 119485 ID: 36de2e

Quick update, I'll try to get the new thread started tomorrow. It's my birthday today and I decided it was a good time to get motivated again.
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No. 119486 ID: 3abd97

>>119485
Cool, welcome back!
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No. 119488 ID: 91ee5f

>>119485
>Quick update, I'll try to get the new thread started tomorrow.
Yay!

>It's my birthday today and I decided it was a good time to get motivated again.
And happy birthday!
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No. 119531 ID: 3cb691

Guessing something came up?
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No. 119668 ID: 36de2e

>>119531
Unfortunately yes. I got a really nasty flu and today is the first real day I've felt well enough to post the update on here because I was genuinely frustrated and ashamed in myself for disappointing everyone again. The past 7 days have been the sickest I've ever had in my life and I can only hope for your continued patience. I know it sounds completely ridiculous but I'm being 100% honest here.
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No. 119669 ID: 3ce125

Flu is serious business.
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No. 119684 ID: 91ee5f

>>119668
Getting rid of that flu is way more important than updating your quest to entertain us. So don’t worry about it.
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No. 124070 ID: 7281b0

I feel like I need to seriously explain myself, as well as my super long absence and the current state of my Quest so here goes.

After the flu fiasco right before I was going to continue, a couple things happened that made it personally difficult for me to continue.

1. I was embarrassed that I failed my readers because of something completely out of my control, and made myself look like I was just bullshitting you guys when I promised the updates.

2. After it happened I felt like I seriously fucked up and needed to re-evaluate how I was going to do the quest, and hard.

In real life I actually do suffer from an anxiety disorder, nothing like it's portrayed in the quest (obviously) but it's there and it fucks with my life in more subtle ways that I've been struggling to cope with since high school. Combined with crippling low self-esteem it makes doing a quest like this a little stressful, especially if I feel like I'm doing something wrong or not conveying things properly, or my art isn't up to a proper standard.

I've basically been really anxious about continuing. I really do want to, but my own personal issues have been seriously holding me back and I feel like if anything I should explain myself to you guys properly.

Eventually I will continue, I still want to do this, but it's gonna be a bit tough until I can push through this personal shit.

Thanks for understanding, hopefully I'll be able to pull myself together asap for you guys.
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No. 124076 ID: 40197f

Whatever you have to deal with, it's understandable. I just wish the best for you. Like anyone, everyone deserves peace in their mind.

I myself will patiently wait for the return of the cute corvid. But take the time you need. =3
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No. 124077 ID: 896ddf

I wish you wish you the best of luck and most importantly...

https://me.me/i/the-adventures-of-business-cat-hang-in-there-baby-hang-22174298
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No. 124078 ID: b1b4f3

Don't feel too bad about being late. Happens all the time.
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No. 124082 ID: 622939

Yeah, dont worry too much. It happens.
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No. 124083 ID: ae2184

I feel like an authority on never updating so let me give you a couple pieces of unsolicited advice:

1. You may feel that the longer time you spend without updating the bigger your next update should be. This is a trap. Ignore the time passed between updates. Consider someone reading the quest in the future as though it were a finished document.

2. Sometimes you can be very pleasantly surprised how willing and patient your audience can be. Taking long breaks out of nowhere is just a fact of life for this thing most of us do as a hobby. (I have little to no experience of the professional Patreon driven quest world so my advice here may not hold as strongly there.)

3. don't believe in you, believe in me who believes in you ah fuck it just believe in your own ability, you do cool stuff.

4. There is no art quality threshold for questing. Your art is clear and communicative and charming and I love it. If there was a threshold you'd have already exceeded it. But there isn't and readers will excuse off panels, off days, off weeks, off months. I just finally realised this myself, at time of posting I updated one of my quests with effectively no art at all due to circumstances. Dedicated fans will be okay with this and here's the secret protip: they're better for suggestions anyway!

5. there's more important things in life to worry about than questing just do like whatever
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No. 145401 ID: bdf77c
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145401

Uh...been a bit, eh?
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No. 145402 ID: fe0bf7

Long time no see! Never forgot about this quest and happy to see it back!
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No. 145403 ID: b4c241

I just learned about this quest, and it's already looking interesting. I'll be sure to read through the archive soon.
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No. 145407 ID: 35abe7

Welcome back Cirr, uh I mean gnoll, I mean Lucid, I mean Miasma. Good to see you again.

And I would worry about take a brake between quest, I’m pretty sure a bunch authors have do so, we’re just glad to see you’re back.
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No. 145409 ID: bdf77c

>>145402
>>145407
Hopefully I'll be able to keep to it a bit better this time.
>>145403
Hope you enjoy it dude! The first part is definitely going to be different from how it is now...especially in terms of art style.
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No. 145419 ID: ef851f
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145419

First of all, congratulations on your return to creating quests. Also, as a token of my thanks for following my weird story, I made something for you. I hope you will like it.
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No. 145420 ID: fe0bf7

>>145419
That outfit is pretty sick and works with her so well!
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No. 145425 ID: 400dcc

>>145419
Yooo thanks so much dude, I love it! It'll finally give her a little more variety in her wardrobe.
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No. 145426 ID: 5a98bf

>>145425

Hello, no need for you to draw her in that costume. When I saw her, she looked like a previous goth girl or somebody who would become one, and that is what the drawing depicted. I also have to ask, do you use the Discord that Questden has?
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No. 145434 ID: 2028c2
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145434

>>145426
Not only did I draw her in the dress, to the best of my ability, I decided to throw someone else in too, also to the best of my ability. I wasn't sure if you had an official colour scheme for her or not though so I made her black and white like the Quest.

I wasn't aware there was a Discord for Quest authors tbh, I'd have to think on if I want to join or not though. I'm honestly kinda shy about joining Discord groups.
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No. 145435 ID: d1dbca

>>145434
First of all, this looks fantastic. Rope Bunny has never looked better. If you want, just tell me what you'd like me to draw, and I'll do it. As for Discord, I primarily use it to look at the art of others and to talk with other quest authors. But I get it if itsn't for you.
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No. 145438 ID: 187b04

>>145435
I'm really glad you like it! If you really want to, maybe a follow-up picture with a bunny enforcer of your choice playing with Charlotte?

I'll consider the Discord thing, maybe once I get more of my Quest moving I'd feel more comfortable with it. Thanks for the offer though!
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No. 145439 ID: c9178d

>>145438
How much do you want it to go in a spicy direction, from 1 to 10?
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No. 145440 ID: c9178d

>>145438
Right now, we are having a watch party on Discord. Nalthar hosts them all the time.
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No. 145441 ID: 187b04

>>145439
You go as spicy as you want dude!
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No. 145442 ID: 2c88b9

>>145441

Be careful what you wish for...Just kidding. I will make a short narrative around it.
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No. 145444 ID: 2c88b9
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145444

Rope Bunny brings in the strange bird to the rest of the enforcers, and they start discussing.

Lady Buttania: "Who is she? She looks strange."

Burrow Buster: "Not to mention that she looks fat."

Lady Buttania: "Don't be rude, she is not fat, she is just plump like a fresh fruit."

Rope Bunny: "I don't know who she is or where she came from. So I decided to bring her here."

Wax Porenetic: "Well, let me find out."
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No. 145445 ID: 2c88b9
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145445

Wax Porenetic: "Are you seeking us out to feel something you never felt before. We can all make you feel different things, all you need to do is just ask, and we will make your wildest dream a reality."
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No. 145446 ID: 2c88b9
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145446

Lady Buttania: "Or maybe she is an offering to us from a tribe that wants to make contact with us. I mean, just look at her butt, it is so impressive that it even gives Pound Cake a run for her money."

When Lady Buttania touches the ass of the bird, she makes a strange sound.
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No. 145447 ID: 2c88b9
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145447

Whipsalot: "Ladies, ladies, give our new visitor some breathing room and keep your hands to yourself. It is a lot for her to take in all at once, and we do not wish to intimidate her. First things first, Rope Bunny, remove her bindings if she wants them back, you will tie her up even better."
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No. 145448 ID: 2c88b9
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145448

Whipsalot: "Listen, whoever you are, we can give you a fun experience, and you can experience all of this like a pleasant dream. But if you want to experience playing with us, you will have to remove all your clothes and climb onto the bed in this room."
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No. 145449 ID: 2c88b9
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145449

The bird does what she was instructed to do, but there was still some hesitation in her actions, and then she gets to the bed, still not sure where all of this is going.

Whipsalot: "Excellent, now girls surround her and leave a space next to her for me. Let's make her feel comfortable."
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No. 145450 ID: 2c88b9
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145450

All the bunnies surround the bird on the bed.

Whipsalot: "So if you want to play with any of us, just say it, and any one of us will try to accommodate your taste. So who interests you the most?"

Rope Bunny: "........Do you want to be tied up?"

Burrow Buster: "She is not going to pick anybody. She is just going to remain silent."

Lady Buttania: "I have to apologize for my previous actions. But I would like to explore your body, it will be a shocking experience for both of us."

Wax Porenetic: "She is going to pick me, I can see it in her eyes. The burning passion, the heat, and the release. She wants what I can give her."

Pound Cake: "I can give you a really passionate hug."



This was a brief interaction I decided to create between our characters because I couldn't decide who to pick. If you want more interaction, just pick which bunny you want to play with, and write her name. Or if you prefer, this is when the interaction will end.
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145451

>>145450
This whole thing was awesome dude, thank you! Despite being overwhelmed and confused Chsrlotte consults the deepest recesses of her mind to make a decision...and by that I mean I couldn't decide and let the wheel choose.
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No. 145453 ID: f067bc
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145453

The bird points towards Whipsalot, while the majority of the other bunnies respond with disappointment.

Whipsalot: "I feel so honored that you picked me out of all the other enforcers. I only hope that my way of stimulation will go along with your pain tolerance. Now follow me to my room, and there we can start."
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145454

The bird followed Whipsalot to the room, and there she was instructed to put shackles over all her limbs. The bird did as she was told, but her body was put in an unpleasant position.
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145455

Whipsalot: "I apologize for the discomfort, it is merely to keep you from moving to that I don't end up hitting you in the head."
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145456

Whipsalot: "I know that all of this seems scary, but don't worry. I will guide you through it, just relax and think of pleasant things."
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145457

Whipsalot: "I will start with simple lashes and add more and more intensity with every additional swing. This will get your body accustomed to the whip before I start with the real interaction."

The bird nods in agreement.
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Whipsalot: "Alright then, here we go. I know that you will be able to handle this."
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Whipsalot gives her first wipe strike, and the birds react with shock. As the additional whips come along, she reacts less shocked to them.
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The bird started to feel more fear in the anticipation of additional swings and the anticipation of more to cum.
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After a couple of them, the bird started to get more into the rhythm of it. Instead of finching after each strike, she started positioning her body for a better angle.
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All of this excitement continues until the body was no longer able to handle it.
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Whipsalot: "Oh, what a mess I make out of you."
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Whipsalot: "No need to close your legs, there is nothing to be ashamed of it, this is just your body reaching its limit. In fact, open them up and let me kiss you to make it feel better."
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The bird did as she was instructed, and as the Whipsalot started licking, she felt such a different pleasure compared to the previous version of it.
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Whipsalot and the bird officially finished their interaction and were resting after the ordeal.
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Whipsalot: "You might seem scared and confused, but there is more to you. While I was giving you the whipping, you didn't make a single sound. You have tenacity and endurance. You can accomplish anything that you put your mind to. We don't usually do this, but we can make you an honorary enforcer. But that is if you want to be that in the first place."
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Whipsalot: "No matter what you decide about my offer, I just want to say that I hope you got what you were looking for coming here and interacting with all of us."




This last offer is just not a way for me to implement your character into my story, but more of a what-if scenario. Like, how would Charlotte fight if she were an opponent from my NSFW story? What would be her weapon, and what kink would be attached to it? What would be her weakness and the other stuff? If you want, just describe her, and I will draw how she would look. But as mentioned, that is if you are up for it.
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