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73168 No. 73168 ID: f7d109

http://www.tgchan.org/kusaba/quest/res/521087.html

Something Ive been putting together for a while: a story of madness, insomnia and hopefully suspense.

Criticisms, concerns, comments and conjecture are all welcome.
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No. 73266 ID: 9ddf68

so are you going to start a new thread or for the next chapter or you going to continue to use the one it's on for a bit longer?
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No. 73267 ID: a01b62

Neat quest so far. Reminds me a lot of Rina Quest.
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No. 73283 ID: 91c1b3

Cool quest, I really like the comic book style.
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No. 73285 ID: f7d109

>>73266
I'm going to keep it open for now, The next chapter shouldn't run too long.
>>73168
thanks! I haven't read Rina quest yet but I'm enjoying Advocate so far, I'll have to check it out.
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No. 73286 ID: 0eef61

Are you on IRC?
You should go on IRC
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No. 73288 ID: f7d109

>>73286
Ive been kind of lurking on IRC the last few days. I'm on now though if you wanted to ask me something.
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No. 73309 ID: 9ddf68

something I find interesting here is that in Dale's ID he had normal eyes but since the first panel where we actually got a good look at him his eyes are black but i'm not sure if it has something to do with the book or just because Dale is sleep deprived.
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No. 73312 ID: a01b62

Well, your quest seems to be an instant hit. Congratulations!
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No. 73320 ID: ea4b0b
File 137320130630.png - (149.77KB , 500x500 , dale.png )
73320

I'm tellin' you hank, its them aliens what done this!
Not sorry in the slightest.
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No. 73361 ID: f595d3

>>73320
That...actually looks really good on him..
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No. 73362 ID: 91c1b3

>>73320
At least we know that he'd look good in that outfit. (in case we ever need to switch clothes/disguise) The hat covers his scarred forehead and the glasses cover his weird eyes.

Question to the author if it's not talked about in quest later; Can/does anyone notice that Dale's eyes are black? Or is it just something only we (the readers) can see? Also, It seems like Beth's eyes have changed since she touched the book. (making the pupils smaller/sharper) Is this change in appearance intended?
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No. 73367 ID: f7d109

>>73362
Beth's eyes haven't changed, her pupils are just very expressive.
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No. 73368 ID: f99dee

>>73362
We just gotta make sure the cap is large enough size that it doesn't cause pain around the friggin' hole in his skull.

So, Toxoglossa, is there some kind of game mechanic in place? You said earlier that Beth "tapped into her resolve". Are faith and resolve some kind of stats or was it just a figure of speech?
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No. 73374 ID: c23ab0
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73374

I am a horrible person.
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No. 73375 ID: f7d109
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73375

I'm trying to keep the game mechanics to a minimum. Things like inventory slots, stats and meters aren't really meshing with the story and I'm trying to keep them more abstract, more like a CYOA than a video game. I thought about having a sleep bar or something but it would be completely out of tone.
The tapping into her resolve was one of a couple experiments I've ended up doing with the storytelling. I might do more of it, but the only people we've controlled so far are Dale and Beth and it'll probably be less of an explicit "thing".
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No. 73376 ID: 9ddf68

>>73375
you mean kinda like the blue text in FTL? where you don't really need it to pass (ex: high resolve) but you're more likely to get a better outcome if you do have it.
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No. 73396 ID: f7d109

>>73376
yeah kind of. Like how Beth was able to focus and calm herself despite the circumstances, but when Dale tries he ends up throwing up.
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No. 73503 ID: f7d109
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73503

BEEP BEEP I'M A JEEP
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No. 73505 ID: c23ab0

>>73503

BEST END
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No. 73594 ID: f7d109
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73594

Tell Todd.... To keep an eye out.
YEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAHHHHHHH!!!!!!!
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No. 73595 ID: f5680f

>>73594
Oh god ahahaahhaa
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No. 73597 ID: 2f4b71

>>73503
That can't be right... the jeep's the right way up.
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No. 73603 ID: ea4b0b

>>73320
>>73594

A prophet, that is what I am
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No. 73664 ID: f7d109
File 137394650226.jpg - (41.24KB , 490x600 , dale progression.jpg )
73664

here's a little evolution of Dale: From the first sketch of him (apparently I was going to call him Gus?), to his sprite, to what I've been working with lately.
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No. 73665 ID: f7d109
File 137394670598.jpg - (33.86KB , 307x600 , beth progression.jpg )
73665

Here's Beth's evolution: apparently I originally named her Jen. Also I swapped her hair curl back and forth a couple times.
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No. 73666 ID: ea4b0b

>>73665
rad, gon do shit with this later.
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No. 73703 ID: a6a6d6

I'm really enjoying this quest so far: the story's great, the characters are genuine-feeling and likeable, and the artwork's incredible... so expressive. Keep up the most excellent work.
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No. 73704 ID: 5337ed

This quest is radicool. I am hype to see more updates.
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No. 73725 ID: 9414aa
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73725

"We can't stop here! This is worm country!"
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No. 73727 ID: 2f4b71

Holy Jesus. What are these god-damned tentacles?!
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No. 73755 ID: ca1c58

They could be penises for traumatic insemination :C

Radula could be trying to get us manpregnant :C
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No. 73756 ID: f7d109

>>73725
"There is nothing in the world more helpless and irresponsible and depraved than a man in the depths of a Leech binge, and I knew we'd get into that rotten stuff pretty soon."

seriously that's awesome
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No. 73900 ID: bf54a8

idea. next time we pass out we reach up, rip open the wound, pull out the leech, and through it at radula.
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No. 74570 ID: c23ab0

I would just like to point out that there's a huge difference between going deaf from a loud noise, and going deaf from the pressure wave of an explosion.

That said I don't really know if the coolant system on an MRI exploding would produce a strong enough pressure wave. It's not exactly designed to explode, and the nanoseconds it takes for the pressure to rupture the metal shielding enough to get out quickly would make it a broader wave.

That said we've got a great hear no evil see no evil speak no evil dynamic going here!
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No. 74576 ID: a23afd

>>74570
Where's the speak no evil?
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No. 74614 ID: c23ab0

>>74576

Dale screams so much, he's sure to lose his voice eventually.
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No. 74632 ID: 2f4b71

>>74570
>That said I don't really know if the coolant system on an MRI exploding would produce a strong enough pressure wave. It's not exactly designed to explode, and the nanoseconds it takes for the pressure to rupture the metal shielding enough to get out quickly would make it a broader wave.
Normally (as normal as a we-should-never-ned-to-do-this emergency quench is), a quenching MRI should safely* vent a stream of expanding helium outside through a safety duct. If for some reason that duct is disconnected or blocked, or the quench isn't initiated controllable for whatever reason, you can pop the pressure vessel. e.g: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KRfp7qS9Db0 Not a good thing in an enclosed area.


*'Safely' here, meaning 'air liquefies and pools around the ducting, so any ignition sources nearby are a Bad Thing'.
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No. 74647 ID: ed0a4b

So today I learned what a radula actually is.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Radula
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No. 74648 ID: 4c8520

>>74647
And it also says what the name Toxoglossa refers to.
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No. 74649 ID: 57a559

>>74647
You're a Cracked Reader!
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No. 74650 ID: a23afd

>>74647
...Radula's barb is a Toxoglossan Radula.
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No. 74651 ID: f7d109
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74651

More early art, here's a colored pic of Beth back when she was named Jen, and back before I had Sai.
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No. 74652 ID: f7d109
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74652

And here's Jeff back when he was named Marcel.
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No. 74657 ID: f7d109
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74657

As requested here's a quick color scheme for Dale. But I still feel like its open to interpretation.
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No. 74658 ID: f7d109

>>74648
I was wondering when someone would make that connection. It translates to poison tongue.
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No. 74665 ID: 60800c

I like how you're not afraid to give the protagonists lasting injuries. Taking away something that everybody takes for granted (e.g. hearing) adds to the survival horror atmosphere well.
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No. 74668 ID: 4a20fa

Really love the art style you've got going for this; all loose and expressive, sketchy and fast (yet technically proficient). It's pretty much perfect for quests.
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No. 74669 ID: a23afd

Hey, if we drank that coffee... would shit still have gone down in the hospital?
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No. 74708 ID: f7d109

>>74669
Honestly I was surprised that no one wanted the coffee. Some of the MRI room events were still possible, but Dale would have been in much better condition to talk to the sheriff. Radula would have eventually made an appearance, but it would have been later and in a very different manner than before.
The coffee was a pretty old pot and would have made Dale sick though.
Initially there was also going to be an opportunity to use that gram of coke, but since he hasn't touched it yet he never established a dependency.

I don't know what I should consider a spoiler or not but I'm really amazed by the decisions the readers have made and the way they've influenced things.

>>74665
Thanks! I had thought that wandering around in the dark is neat and spooky and all, but I wondered what happens when you're essentially being hunted and you lose one of your other senses. Also I know there's going to be some level of plot armor on characters, but I definitely want the readers to feel invested in keeping everyone alive and safe.

Hell, even Radula has displayed vulnerability. Everyone keeps saying "throw leeches at him." but ignores the fact that he bleeds like anyone else, albeit he's full of poison.

The characters are in danger, but I'm also working to give you the ability to make informed decisions, as well as gut instinct. I don't want anyone to feel like they should spend a lot of time second guessing themselves. Unpredictable things are going to arise from decisions no matter what, and Dale's pep talk to Beth was in part directed at the readers.

>>74668
Thanks! When I started working on the idea I was really frustrated that I couldn't write and draw finished images as fast as I wanted to produce them. But as a quest I can work fast and keep ideas fresh while still keeping to a good structure. Looking at the story as it was originally laid out, it was actually pretty "meh" and aside from a few moments, it definitely wouldn't have been half as interesting.

There was a scene where Dale falls asleep playing video games.
I'm not even kidding.
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No. 74713 ID: c23ab0

Impossible. Nobody could fall asleep playing video games.
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No. 74715 ID: 91c1b3

>MRI room events
That is actually really really cool. How many different scenarios did you have planned out for that one room?
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No. 74716 ID: 57a559

My favorite part of suggesting is when we surprise authors.
The worst part is when authors never tell us when we surprise them. You avoided the worst part!
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No. 74739 ID: f7d109

>>74715
I had two or three things lined up as the most likely outcomes and a few decisions along the way helped with the flavor.

That being said, its hard for me to anticipate where things are going to go, this latest chapter especially.
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No. 74863 ID: ccf689

>>74708

> There was a scene where Dale falls asleep playing video games.

Was he trying to "play" MGS4?
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No. 75014 ID: a23afd

I gotta say, I don't like how Beth carefully ignored any suggestions that would have prevented this. Looking through the footage to see who shot the security officer, the perfectly legitimate logic behind suspecting the doctor, tazing BOTH of them, or tazing whoever was stronger. Instead all we did was kick the gun away, when the doctor already had a spare. Now either the doctor gets shot, or we try to rush her with the tazer and probably get Beth shot.
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No. 75015 ID: 73ca72

I thought we tried to view security footage, and it got all grainy?

And how were we supposed to know that the medical personnel would have a spare, second gun on them when we've only seen one gun in this building?
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No. 75016 ID: 5fd94e

>>75015


We saw the empty holster on the security guard
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No. 75018 ID: 91c1b3

>>75015
We saw one gun and the lack of two guns. (the original gun being missing and the security guards holster being empty. We even mentioned it to the cop when he came in the security room)

Not seeing her on the footage can be put as making the dramatic reveal later better, but having her kick the gun away when only two people said to (and seven said to grab it instead) is a bit of bad form. It can just be for the sake of plot though I guess. I've heard someone say before that the author should pick out of the suggestion that fits the situation best, so it is within your right to do so.
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No. 75249 ID: e97f9d

I really like Jeff. His personality, his backstory, his character design. The tail tuft is a nice touch.

Also, I think that it is entirely up to the author whether they let the most popular suggestions win (thus leading to the characters occasionally doing stupid things), or the one the character actually likes best (which can feel a little railroady). A mix of the two is, perhaps, best.
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No. 75268 ID: f7d109
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75268

>>75249
A lot of Jeff is actually based off of one of the first friends I made online. A group of us would work on art and bounce concepts off each other way back in the day, and I probably would not have developed as an artist without hanging out with people like him.

Hey guess what I found?
The first Radula sketches ever???
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No. 75371 ID: c23ab0

>>/quest/536000

Oh god... what have I done...

...

I'M NOT SORRY
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No. 75376 ID: bac511

>>75268
Transition from a penguin to a hunch-backed "cloaked" Cthulhu made him much creepier IMO.

Also, Radula basically has Tetragrammaton cleric powers.
This supports our previous plan to keep as much distance between the survivors and Radula to limit the range his powers to his immediate vicinity. Then he's only be as hard to kill as a Jedi.

But time works against him in the sense that he grows weaker.
And it works against us in the sense that a week without sleep causes permanent mental damage.
Fuck.
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No. 75414 ID: dbe554

>>75376


He gets all cute when he starts thinking hard about things though, it's adorable almost. Haha
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No. 75542 ID: 36f0d9

Scince the main quest has moved on, and i didnt want to clog it up ill post this little theory here.

Im guessing that should the cacophony consume the choir and reduce everything to noise, eventually a new choir will pattern itself from the noise and gain strength, leading to a new cacophony being born.
this cycle would endlessly loop until something, in this case the universe, stops it. frankly who knows what damage is being done by our universe refusing to just die..
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No. 75545 ID: 57a559

Would it be offensive that I think Radula looks a lot like zoidberg? I'm imagining Dale exposing his head to cuttlefish pheremones the first time he met Radula and Rad's face tentacles just slurping at his head.
"I'm so into you" *slurp* *slurp* *slurp* *slurp* *slurp* *slurp* *slurp* *slurp* *slurp*
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No. 75555 ID: e1609c
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75555

[6:49:05 PM] Amirica: idk just say
[6:49:15 PM] Amirica: idk who this is but i wanted to draw him

so yeah, my buddy drew an exasperated Old One for ya
enjoy
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No. 75561 ID: f7d109
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75561

>>75542
I imagine it would be kind of complicated. Radula's universe is one where time isn't necessarily consecutive. It could be cyclical, nonconsecutive or even be a temporal singularity where every moment happens all at once.
Our universe is the only pocket of existence where that is different, so naturally the Cacophony wants to undo that so it can feast forever on the morsels inside.

>>75555
hahaha oh man that's awesome. Being a N'th dimensional entity stuck in some podunk town chasing down drifters is pretty exhausting and frustrating.

Being an antagonist is hard work. Some times you just need to crack open a refreshing Mountain Dewtm) and rehydrate.
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No. 75567 ID: c23ab0

>>75561

Those glasses. God fucking dammit aaaaa
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No. 75573 ID: 4a20fa

>>75561
Ahahaha
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No. 75577 ID: bd48c5

>>75561
We can't stop here! This is leech country!
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No. 75580 ID: 2f4b71

>>75577
We already did that one!
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No. 75581 ID: bd48c5

>>75580
I know...
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No. 76264 ID: 96c896

Considering what we know of how Radula works now, there is a lingering question to consider. Why didn't he just grab the book after the ambulance crashed? The only explanation I can think of is that he had to retreat to the library because he was about to get hit by the car.

Also, I have an idea for how to eliminate him permanently. Yes, he exists in all timelines and can hop between them, effectively immortal in a way. However, if he dies in ALL TIMELINES, then he just dies. So, to kill him, you have to make it an absolute certainty that he will. In all cases.

One way I can think of is to flood his Library with people. I saw no evidence he had infinite power there. Popping in an army would end him. He would have no chance.

Another way would be to keep him active in the waking world for long enough that his precognition grows too short for him to use it as a method of self defense. Then someone just snipes him before he can react to the incoming death-timeline and run to the Library. Unless there are timelines where he decides to escape to the Library early? Perhaps killing him in the Library is the only way.
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No. 76271 ID: 57a559

Shouldn't there have been a timeline he's already won already? That's all he needs, one win and he has the book. Or does its infinite nature require him to get it in all timelines?
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No. 76278 ID: cae608

>>76271
We must kick his ass in all the timelines.
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No. 76281 ID: 96c896

>>76271
I think that is the case. The Book continues to exist in the universe until it can't, so he must effectively ensure that he 100% recovers the Book before it is actually recovered.

In a way, his timeline is tied inextricably to the Book's.
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No. 76283 ID: 57a559

>>76281
But I take it that if he gets the book in at least one timeline, for that timeline he has a lot of power and control in.
Which makes me wonder if the intermission actually took place in an entirely seperate timeline that will not produce Dale or Beth, shit, it might've been on the exact same time.

Say it's 2013 for Dale and Co., it also was 2013 for DeerGod, OwlPriest, and the hungry hungry Hippo, because that was a timeline offshoot where creation got more powerfully spiritually instead of through technology, like Dale's. It seems implied to be the past, but it also may not be. It could very well have been an equal time in a different place and phase.
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No. 76291 ID: 5acad3
File 137955517282.jpg - (45.78KB , 418x600 , radula design.jpg )
76291

Here's a little reference piece for Radula.
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No. 76379 ID: 7bbaae

...why didn't Radula know that the book would fall and be buried? Does he not use his future sight passively? Does it not give him any idea of what other people are going to do and what happens around him?

If it only tells him what physical paths he might take in the future, it's kindof pointless, isn't it?
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No. 76383 ID: 4a20fa

>>/quest/541842
I assume that because our PoV is Beth, who's never been Radula'd, she can't see the eye thing.
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No. 76384 ID: c23ab0

>>76379

Reality hinders his future sight, the same way it keeps the Cacophany asleep. Plus the book wasn't just buried; it was buried/devoured by a dying otherworldly horror who may or may not be predictable. I can't help but mention that Tiamat looked an awful lot like a tapeworm, which is a relative of the leech. Radula may have bitten off more than he could chew.
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No. 76409 ID: f9cf6a

>>76383
But I thought that Mary saw Dale's dark eyes, back when he was first examined. Back when she had him try on the polarized sunglasses.
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No. 76411 ID: 7bbaae

>>76409
Naw, she put two and two together. Dale said he could see the toxin as black, and his own eyes as black, and Todd's eyes as black.
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No. 76870 ID: 4a20fa

Whoa. It's got all Civilization 1 intro in here.

Pretty awesome, dude.
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No. 76891 ID: 4a20fa

>>/quest/544593
Read the Intermission; it's events from that:
>>/questarch/535009
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No. 76898 ID: c23ab0

>>76891

I know. Beth doesn't though.
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No. 76899 ID: c23ab0
File 138215544861.jpg - (55.05KB , 680x533 , beth_reads_the_third_page.jpg )
76899

And I thought the third page would be about the future!
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No. 76918 ID: 5acad3
File 138221884841.jpg - (863.02KB , 600x9827 , thebook of worms.jpg )
76918

Here's all 5 pages of the BoW stitched together, nearly 10k pixels tall
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No. 76919 ID: 2f4b71

>>76918
It may sound odd, but scrolling through that it almost composed it's own musical score in my head.
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No. 77120 ID: e06746

I find it somewhat terrifying that you are THIS GOOD at making stories about horrible elder things and their cuddlefish servants, and making art to go along with it.

Seriously, why the fuck are cuddlefish so god damn alien? Even among sea creatures, not counting the black depth dwelling fuckers of course.
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No. 77126 ID: 2f4b71

>>77120
>cuddlefish
The anti-Radula!
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No. 77453 ID: 90220e

This is some fantastic art. You should collect this into a comic book when it's done.
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No. 77647 ID: 4a20fa

Oh boy oh boy oh boy paperdoll.
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No. 78292 ID: 7bbaae

Ever since we read the book it seems like the pacing has slowed down a lot.

Is this on purpose?
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No. 78304 ID: 5acad3
78304

>>78292
Not intentionally, but I'm definitely spending more time drawing the panels, which eats up time. Also, I realize that its been pretty dialogue heavy recently, and I want for there to be plenty of room for suggestions to dictate the flow of things. That means I have to do a lot of smaller updates, and they take a while to write. I'm trying to keep things moving at a decent clip though and minimize the fucking around. Its slow but important stuff, since a lot of action sequences are dictated as much by what happens, as they are by decisions made before hand.
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No. 79105 ID: 57a559
 

Useful information about our enemy
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No. 79132 ID: 3c0449
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79132

why this hadn't been posted yet is beyond me
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No. 79455 ID: 34381a

hah, I just realized that this quest represents life itself. see, the Cacophony is real life, the in-quest Universe is tgchan, and Radula is our moms constantly telling us to move out of her basement and get a job.

well played, Toxoglossa. I almost didn't see that.
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No. 79814 ID: 2f4b71

>giant librarian Mantis Shrimp
Sonoluminescence for a reading light!
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No. 79815 ID: 0b90a3

>>79132
Obviously Radula just wants to cuddle, cuddle with the whole universe.

>>79814
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=F5FEj9U-CJM
It reads so hard the universe CAN'T HANDLE IT
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No. 80542 ID: 57a559

Hey guys when we killed radula we killed all instances of Radula because of that time singularity where everything is headed.
Something that could destroy Radula's infiniteness was a thing that he said that even the Chorus would be concerned with. So, yeah, that was the exact moment in time where all Radula's converged to one and he got whacked.
And then there was another warning sign that this was the bad thing to do because the Cacophony stirred when Radula got burned, Legion was all "Time is short" which means that event probably happened in enough timelines that it disturbed the Cacophony's sleep and that Radula's health was linked with the Cacophony's slumber.

But like I said in the thread it probably just is another Tower-like event that wakes the Cacophoy's hunger and NOT the whole kitten caboodle. If we think about it, there must have been a timeline convergence at that point in time where the book came into the world and all timelines. If Radula ever looked into the book before that point from his infinite perspective it probably looked similar to the Black Hole that Beth saw.
The fact that reality didn't get eaten in the tower scenario means that it is possible for causality to come and bounce back. We're at a point in time where everything that happens happens at once.
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No. 80552 ID: 72e8d7

I just want to bounce this off a few people before I take this to the main thread. I think we need to get the book and everyone that's asleep out the library FAST! I think Radula just wanted to get the book to the cacophony. Radula doesn't need to be alive for the universe to end; only the book needed to be delivered. By letting Dale go into the library, We've played into Radulas game.

what do you guys think?
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No. 80583 ID: d80a0d

that was Thunderpeep's idea, so unless he was working with Radula, no we didn't.
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No. 81191 ID: 57a559

Since Toxoglossa will be answering questions, (at least I think that's what you said at the end of the quest) I have one about themes.

This is one of the first cosmic horror stories that wasn't a comedy that has a happy ending and we essentially completely broke down and drove a horror insane at the end. Did you forsee a likely happy ending like this? Or did you really want to make a cosmic story where it turns out that, hey, these so called greater, inconceivable beings aren't that unstoppable after all. Essentially, you created an antithesis to Lovecraft thesis, which I believe is that some unknown's are dangerous and are meant to be left alone lest we destroy ourselves in the process.

Also, speaking of lovecraft (I don't know if you dislike the comparisons at all so if they do annoy you I apologize), did that universe have the Cthulhlu mythos as entertainment pieces or is it like The Walking Dead where no zombie culture ever developed and no reference could ever be made.

I was just curious because if someone bought Dale a Cthulhu plush with W's custom stitched in the eyes as a joke for all they've been through, that might be a little funny. And that can only be possible if cosmic horror pop culture actually exists in-universe.
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No. 81215 ID: 0b90a3

>>81191
>This is one of the first cosmic horror stories that wasn't a comedy that has a happy ending and we essentially completely broke down and drove a horror insane at the end. Did you forsee a likely happy ending like this? Or did you really want to make a cosmic story where it turns out that, hey, these so called greater, inconceivable beings aren't that unstoppable after all. Essentially, you created an antithesis to Lovecraft thesis, which I believe is that some unknown's are dangerous and are meant to be left alone lest we destroy ourselves in the process.

From very early on I was hoping to use the leech in Dale's head as a kind of Chekhov's gun for beating the Cacophony. I'm not sure when the idea of using it to put it to sleep and then slowly lobotomizing came into play, but it wasn't until fairly late in the story.

I did want to make it a theme that even horrible nightmares from beyond imagining are fairly vulnerable, and being actually kind of frail because they aren't a product of a natural universe. Radula ended up being kind of a baby about things, which is honestly something you find in even the most vicious of predators.

>Also, speaking of lovecraft (I don't know if you dislike the comparisons at all so if they do annoy you I apologize), did that universe have the Cthulhlu mythos as entertainment pieces or is it like The Walking Dead where no zombie culture ever developed and no reference could ever be made.

>I was just curious because if someone bought Dale a Cthulhu plush with W's custom stitched in the eyes as a joke for all they've been through, that might be a little funny. And that can only be possible if cosmic horror pop culture actually exists in-universe.

I imagine either the Lovecraft mythos or something like it would be present in their world, but I never really made much reference to it besides calling things cthonic every once in a while. I did feel kind of dumb having put so much thought into designing radula only to realize that I had basically made a Mind-flayer with a pointy tongue.
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No. 81220 ID: fc62c2

don't be silly. Radula's look is so much more innovative than a blue guy with a squid head. and his method of enslaving others is way more metal than just "ooo mind magic".

say, I couldn't help but notice that Dale never put Cac into eternal sleep, just sleep. he's bound to wake up some time, right? does this mean you might make a sequel quest sometime in the future? also, do you plan on making more quests in general?
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No. 81233 ID: 53ba34

>>81220
the end of the book is 'sleep'. a story ends "and so they went to sleep" unless another book is written, that is the end. they are asleep until the next book.
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No. 81235 ID: eb10ea

>>81233
I'm now trying to imagine what it would feel like for your tongue to fall asleep.

Anyway, how could the story have played out differently? What would have happened if Dale used the coke, or drank the coffee, or if we didn't figure out how to cure Todd with the leech?
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No. 81237 ID: e1609c

>>81235
probably like you ate something mildly spicy
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No. 81269 ID: 8d16b1

Well I always appreciate when a quest actually makes it all the way to the end, because that just doesn't happen enough. That said, it was such a strong, victorious, triumphant feeling at the end, that I was actually thrown for a loop by Radula's epilogue. It felt lonely and hollow, and kind of sad but it was really cool. The Radula perspective stuff could have so easily ruined the whole thing, but it was the best parts.
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No. 81271 ID: 0b90a3

>>81235

>How could the story have played out differently?

A lot of it would be kind of hard to say, since I didn't have a concrete plan for most of the story. I do know what kind of consequences I had planned for some of the decisions and how they would have changed a few things down the line though. But as a whole I kept it very loose, with really only the first chapter or two mapped out and with an ideal end goal of beating Radula / Cacophony in the dream world.

>What would have happened if Dale used the coke,

Taking the cocaine early on would have kept Dale going long enough to get to town, where he would have likely met Jeff first. Early drafts of the story had him possibly go with Jeff to his mother's house in the suburbs, play video games and meet his sister Sue, who was a possible target for Radula and had a stash of Ritalin to steal (or not). He probably would have ended up falling asleep there because I wanted to establish the consequences of sleeping and introduce Radula pretty early on. Other early plans for the story involved balancing staying awake while feeding a drug addiction and keeping the trust of the rest of the party. The universally negative reaction to the cocaine kept it from ever really being an option though. When they got to the hospital I considered giving Dale another chance to use it, but decided to soft-ball it with the coffee instead. I was surprised to see that rejected as well, but it gave me more chances to draw Radula, so I was happy with it.

>or drank the coffee

Drinking the (day old) coffee would have kept Dale awake through the MRI as well as made him sick. This would have meant more time spent talking to Lynwood and choices whether to try and ditch him or go in for questioning, which could have led to all sorts of problems explaining the cocaine. Most of chapter 4 was, in all honesty, very unplanned, because of all of the directions it could have gone in. Though I wanted the threat of incarceration to be a really serious problem and was interested in making Lynwood a secondary antagonist at first. Originally I had intended for him to be one of the infected, but when I saw how little anyone trusted him, I decided Mary would make a better candidate instead.

>or if we didn't figure out how to cure Todd with the leech?

Curing Todd was a literal do or die moment. I wanted to establish the connection between the leeches and the poison very quickly and if he hadn't been cured Beth would have killed him. That would have basically changed her character completely, making her much less supportive and it would have ended up as a much darker story. It probably would have led towards having to go the police station and may have ended up separating the two player characters for longer.

Todd also was the only other person at the hospital that could see the infected, which forced the infected Dr. Slate to attack. Letting Lynwood see the security footage allowed him to piece together the events while you were unconscious and let him interrupt Mary. Otherwise she would have had the chance to capture the group and take them to the chapel, and would have likely killed someone.

Dale's suicide attempt would have likely been affected by Todd's loss as well, and even if he didn't succeed, just the attempt would have likely had pretty serious consequences.

There's a couple things that honestly evolved on the fly
Originally 5 of the characters were each tied to one of the 5 senses:
Dale would have been the only one that could actually see Rdula but not touch it.
Beth would have been able to actually touch it and thus attack it.
Jeff originally was able to speak to the Chorus and had done so all his life.
Radula could taste others thoughts and memories, and communicated only through its venom, but would have required a constant connection to it victim to control it.
Lynwood, as a cop was literally tracking Dale by his smell, and could smell the presence of Radula.

I abandoned that concept, but kept Dale's black eyes, which ended up being a good indicator for the infected/cured, even if the whole "magic polarization" and black scalera / white iris thing made no sense physically.

>>81220
>do you plan on making more quests in general?

I've got a few Ideas that I'm playing with and am working to piece something together. I'm not sure how long it will take before I feel like its ready to start but I want to have a new quest in the near future (hopefully, say like 1-2 months?). I'm really excited to start though and I had a blast making BoW.

>say, I couldn't help but notice that Dale never put Cac into eternal sleep, just sleep. he's bound to wake up some time, right? does this mean you might make a sequel quest sometime in the future?

A week or two ago I would have laughed and told you absolutely not, and would just have referenced BoW in other quests at some point.

But...There are more songs in the darkness.
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No. 81272 ID: 0b90a3
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81272

Some more terrifying than others.
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No. 81273 ID: 57a559

>>81272
I feel this is a King in Yellow reference now, which makes me think of True Detective, and now Lynwood has a handlebar mustache.

You know about Carcosa?

Now, if that is actually a King in Yellow reference, that means there's a Theatre in Radula's world, or another world all together. Also playbooks. And giving that the Chorus is... a Chorus, and you just mentioned songs, that MIGHT mean the Chorus ain't purely good either, and might have plans for the mortals beyond just keeping them alive.
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No. 81276 ID: 57a559

Wait, scratch that
Ray would have the handlebar mustache since he has the dark eye vision, like Cohle's hallucinations.
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No. 81278 ID: ca65e6

>>81271
Will the Chorus eventually reveal themselves again to the world that they created?
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No. 81352 ID: 0b90a3

>>81273
>I feel this is a King in Yellow reference now, which makes me think of True Detective, and now Lynwood has a handlebar mustache.

>You know about Carcosa?

I try not to make direct references a thing and I actually haven't read a King in Yellow, though it does sound pretty awesome. Some things are more than a little influenced by something (mostly people) and a few things ended up being similar to things that I didn't even know existed until pointed out.

>Now, if that is actually a King in Yellow reference, that means there's a Theatre in Radula's world, or another world all together. Also playbooks. And giving that the Chorus is... a Chorus, and you just mentioned songs, that MIGHT mean the Chorus ain't purely good either, and might have plans for the mortals beyond just keeping them alive.

One of the things that I do like about eldrich mythologies is that its about beings that aren't good or evil, they simply ARE. I tried to keep Radula from being downright evil (even if it ended up being a bit of a hypocrite from time to time), and in its eyes its actions are benevolent. It ended up displaying mercy (or some twisted version of it), and would usually end up attacking out of frustration. In my eyes Radula and the Cacophony are neither good nor evil, only very very alien.

By the same token, the Chorus is also neither good or evil. They are an ancient pantheon; a little less alien, since they created the world that gives mortals context, but still something outlandish. Anyone who's read mythology knows that the old pantheons were as terrifying as they were benevolent.

>>81278
>Will the Chorus eventually reveal themselves again to the world that they created?

Hard to say. They swore to keep from directly interfering with mortal affairs long ago, out of fear of being found by the cacophony again. But with Radula neutralized, they may choose to re-emerge eventually.

Whether or not that would be a good thing remains to be seen.
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No. 81378 ID: 57a559

Why didn't Radula wait until almost everyone in the universe was dead and no one one could really resist the awakening of the Cacophony? Are mortals tasty spices and he really does care about pleasing the Cacophony with tasty mortals to consume for all eternity? Or is he religiously interested in enlightening a lot of people? Or was it "Oh man, if I let the world exist to long the Chorus could get the book and then that specific universe will never be eaten" and I understand that the Cacophony is ambitiously hungry and wants all universes so then I'd know that would be unacceptable. Or when the Cacophony starts eating the universe, causality will require it the mostly happen at a specific point in time before it spreads to the past and then the future?

It sounds like he could just straight up make a deal with the main gang to wait until mostly everyone was dead, like that was an offer that was brought up once. And the jump between the tower and the present was instantaneous for Radula. Shit, he already detained the Proffesor before even the tower, it seems like.

Also, we never did get this answer when I asked it in the main quest, but has the government mostly always known about Radula and the other world and stuff, but it doesn't tell the lower brass? Or was that its first experience with otherworldly shit? I'm really intrigued on how the world's governments would react to all this news, potential for how it would affect warfare, medicine, etc. Even culture.

And HAS the government covered up aliens too? I imagine there's actual aliens aliens, and not alien looking gods and concepts. I mainly just want to know how successful they would be at covering up something when so many civilians know the truth, and space alien cover ups would be the only basis for their experience with a cover up this size if they had to cover up something.
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No. 81379 ID: 57a559

Also what was Dale studying in College?
And what was he going to ask his professor that got him into this mess? Did Homework literally wreck most of Dale's life (and face)?

I realize we know Dale the least, despite being the main protagonist. Or the first. Honestly Beth is probably the most main one. Lot about her.
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No. 81414 ID: 0b90a3

>>81378
>Why didn't Radula wait until almost everyone in the universe was dead and no one one could really resist the awakening of the Cacophony?...

Most of this falls under the category of "Radula being lazy", which sounds counter-intuitive but from a fractal causality standpoint I feel like it makes some sense.

When Radula enters the real world, that forces it to become part of causality. Every action it takes causes the universe to branch out into another infinite network of possibilities, which means more universes that require invading. And since the Chorus, which in theory is its primary target, is hidden among the folds of causality, its goal would be to keep the infinite possible realities to the smallest infinity possible. So it is forced to follow the natural progression of causality, which is why it finds the whole thing so frustrating. The Book helps it keep on track and keeps it from interfering too much in the order of causality, making for the most efficient possible harvest. By keeping the Book away from Radula, the Chorus expanded the labyrinth of universes to live in.

This is also the reason Radula doesn't just hop into the universe, gather a critical mass of followers and kill itself immediately. Sure it opens up the universe for the Cacophony, but it also creates another identical universe where the Chorus can still hide because Radula is still alive. Although in theory, there was a universe where Radula killed itself on top of the tower as suggested in the intermission, and the world ended because of it.

>When the Cacophony starts eating the universe, causality will require it the mostly happen at a specific point in time before it spreads to the past and then the future?

Each universe has a specific point where it breaks through, in accordance to causality, but once it does the Cacophony doesn't just eat matter, or energy. Once it gains a foothold it starts to break down the laws the Chorus put into place. With those gone every moment is the future and the past, and everything that can happen, happens all at once: basically the Cacophony's natural habitat. Its goal isn't just to eat the universe and move on: it wants to eat every universe forever in a white hot, temporal singularity of hunger.

> Shit, he already detained the Professor before even the tower, it seems like.

Unfortunately time/space hijinks can make a mess of any story, especially a reader-driven one. So for all the talk about everything happening at once and nightmare dimensions, I tried to keep it pretty straightforward. Radula treats time more like a landscape it can roam around in, rather than the straight line we all travel, but it uses major events like the tower, or mental connections with those asleep close to the book to pinpoint its location.

>Also, we never did get this answer when I asked it in the main quest, but has the government mostly always known about Radula and the other world and stuff, but it doesn't tell the lower brass?

I operated under the assumption that Radula didn't reappear in the real world until the professor unearthed the Book somewhere in the mid-east some time before the events of the story. His adventure would probably be interesting to tell at some point, and I regret not getting a chance to develop him, but any knowledge the modern world had of Radula would have been a result of his reappearance.

After the tower the Chorus swore to keep any further involvement with mortals to an absolute minimum, to keep from awakening the Cacophony. Whether or not the US government in the story has had contact or knowledge of aliens is something that would probably be discussed in the next part of the story. I definitely think they would be present in the universe, and probably a great deal of them have encountered Radula in one reality or another (*cough* crossover? *cough*), but I haven't decided if the government would have had any involvement with them.

>I'm really intrigued on how the world's governments would react to all this news, potential for how it would affect warfare, medicine, etc. Even culture.

That'll probably be an interesting thing to see play out. Of course, when you have the combined knowledge of literally everything that ever happened, ever, the problem becomes: how do you find anything useful in it?

>Also what was Dale studying in College?
And what was he going to ask his professor that got him into this mess? Did Homework literally wreck most of Dale's life (and face)?

Professor Schreater was Dale's Cultural Anthropology teacher. I figured Dale for a history major out of convenience, but he would probably be studying something in the humanities (or whatever you'd call that in a world of animal people). I imagined that Dale would have been looking for Schreater to see if he had found anything interesting in his recent trip overseas.

>I realize we know Dale the least, despite being the main protagonist. Or the first. Honestly Beth is probably the most main one. Lot about her.

Dale is kind of the main protagonist in that he is the most of an audience insert. He was honestly kept as much a blank slate as possible, allowing the suggesters to build him through their actions rather than his past. He could have been a drug addled, crowbar-wielding psychopath with the right decisions, and while that would have been fun, I'm glad things worked out for him. I was even open to pretty much any possible romantic entanglement people suggested (minus Jeff), with the understanding that was a horror story about a crazed, unwashed drifter, not a dating-sim.

Beth on the other hand had a very clear role, personality and background from the start and was someone who was questioning a lot about herself. I never expected to have the audience control her as much as they did, but I'm really glad she got so much screen time and I think its really awesome that she became a main protagonist in equal standing. My only frustration with writing her sections ended up being the deaf dialogue. It made for an interesting story in the hospital, but unless they were in immediate danger I started assuming that they found some way to communicate with her that didn't involve wheel-of-fortune style fill in the letters.
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No. 81515 ID: c52b09

>>81414
> Of course, when you have the combined knowledge of literally everything that ever happened, ever, the problem becomes: how do you find anything useful in it?

Easy. Eventually they would hammer out the way to most efficiently and quickly categorize and access specific info, so it stands to reason that that knowledge would be included amongst the whole "everything" thing.
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No. 81516 ID: e3aff6

>>81515
But you would need the knowledge of locations in order to find the knowledge of locations.
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No. 81561 ID: 0b90a3

>>81515
>>81516

Hmmm, would the index of a theoretically infinite source of knowledge also be infinite in size?
So then is there an index of the index?
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No. 81567 ID: 53ba34

>>81561
well, just like "machines, section A" and section A is infinite in size, but is about all the machines, ever, forever.
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No. 81568 ID: c170fd

Yeah, there can't be an infinite number of categories.
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No. 81569 ID: a95b2e

>>81515
You're making one fundamental unfounded assumption, though.

Yes, if the information on how to meaningfully catalog and search infinities exist, it will by definition be included in the collection of all knowledge.

But you're assuming the information exists in the first place.

Knowledge that does not exist (or cannot exist) won't be something that ever shows up.

...it's kind of like math hell. Sure, the proof for every valid theorem exists in the library somewhere. But the only proofs you can be sure exist to be found are there are those you already know. You could literally search forever for the answers to unanswered questions, with no way to know if the answer you're searching for exists.

Or more mundanely: if only the accumulated information of individual universes is available, and ours is the first universe to establish a foothold in the library, there there exists no prior study of, or meta-knowledge pertaining to, the library or or how to deal with it's unique problems.
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No. 81570 ID: a95b2e

>>81568
Why not? Is there an upper limit on ideas or concepts?
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No. 81571 ID: c170fd

>>81570
There is an upper limit to possible/differentiable concepts.
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No. 81573 ID: 53ba34

>>81570
overlap. robots are a type of machine. you wouldn't have robot section AND machine section, just machine.
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No. 81574 ID: 57a559

Amongst already answered questions there's probably bits on them that haven't been discovered yet, and references to unanswered questions they could then refer to.

It's probably a giant web of information and I'm sure that we'd be able to parse something useful out of the information available, given time.
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