Let's see here, Rainy was born in '81 and it's now 2000 in the story? That makes her 19? How old is her Mom?

Re-read the first volume/chapter and noticed something. Is/Was Trish related to the other badgers from that lab or...?

Anyone care to throw me some feedback/constructive criticism on the story so far?

Your story is shit and should probably be canned for looking like kindergarten shit.

>>98283
Some of the choices are a little weak. When the choice is "show an interest in X" or "do X" versus "do nothing", it's not much of a choice. Unless there's a good reason not to do something, or we have a better idea on our own, we're probably going along with it. The quest might be better served in places like that if you actually offered concrete alternatives to pick from, or if you offered no option, and just left it free response.

The "sleep through the car ride (y/n)" prompts were pretty bad too, but mercifully those seem to have died off.

The puzzles / adversaries we're facing have been somewhat interesting in that the "toolkit" our characters have been given doesn't seem to quite fit the situations we're dealing with. For instance, the arm and necklace enchantments appear like they could be somewhat overpowered on first blush, but it's not always that simple to bring them to bear effectively (blindness, inexperience, and being beset make a big difference).

>>98296
con·struc·tive
/kənˈstrəktiv/
adjective

1. serving a useful purpose; tending to build up.
"constructive criticism"
synonyms: useful, helpful, productive, positive, encouraging;

>>98298
>Choices have been weak
This is exactly what I needed to hear. All through the story I've been having the hardest time thinking of a way to end each post/page and think the sleeping in the car prompts should be a dead give away to that. Other than the whole sleeping prompts, what other prompts do you feel have been really boring/not really important.

>The quest might be better served in places like that if you actually offered concrete alternatives to pick from, or if you offered no option, and just left it free response.

So instead of ending with "Any advice/what do?" End with something happening instead?

>The puzzles / adversaries we're facing have been somewhat interesting in that the "toolkit" our characters have been given doesn't seem to quite fit the situations we're dealing with.

I'm honestly not sure if this is suppose to be a good thing or a bad thing?

>So instead of ending with "Any advice/what do?" End with something happening instead?
"Wat do" / open response is fine, so long as it occurs at a point where we can actually choose to do something. Open response after being given a single option is where it seems weak.

>I'm honestly not sure if this is suppose to be a good thing or a bad thing?
Well, I suppose being saddled with problems we're not equipped for could be a bad thing, being forced to apply tools in interesting ways is something I look for in quests, and characters being challenged is what makes stories interesting in the first place.

So I meant it as a good thing, though I suppose if it gets exaggerated to the point where we're unable to cope it's a bad thing.

>>98303
>"Wat do" / open response is fine, so long as it occurs at a point where we can actually choose to do something. Open response after being given a single option is where it seems weak.

I think I'm catching onto what you're saying. In one of the more recent pages Candy asked Rainy if she wanted to play pool while they waited for there clothes to dry. Should I have ended it with the "help me win the game" prompt instead of "should I play" prompt?

>Well, I suppose being saddled with problems we're not equipped for could be a bad thing, being forced to apply tools in interesting ways is something I look for in quests, and characters being challenged is what makes stories interesting in the first place.
>So I meant it as a good thing, though I suppose if it gets exaggerated to the point where we're unable to cope it's a bad thing.

So using things in weird ways is good? I'll have to keep that in mind then.

>Should I have ended it with the "help me win the game" prompt instead of "should I play" prompt?
Something like that would have worked better, yeah. Choosing the game over nothing is a no-brainer. (Even if we could have technically derailed if we'd had a better idea to make bed-sheet ghosts, or ride the dryers, or something).

(Other alternatives that would also have worked: presenting a choice of games to pass the time, or just go right to open input, but have the pool table in the radar and/or room description so focusing on it is available as 'our' idea).

>So using things in weird ways is good? I'll have to keep that in mind then.
Just so long as we don't go full on Sierra Adventure game in terms of required obtuse solutions.

>>98306
>Even if we could have technically derailed if we'd had a better idea to make bed-sheet ghosts, or ride the dryers, or something

I can't stop laughing at the idea of how that whole attack/robber scene could have went if Candy and Rainy were just running around the place with bed-sheets over themselves, pretending to be spooky ghosts.

>(Other alternatives that would also have worked: presenting a choice of games to pass the time, or just go right to open input, but have the pool table in the radar and/or room description so focusing on it is available as 'our' idea).

Something else I'll have to keep in mind about now. Thanks for all the feedback!

>don't go full on Sierra Adventure game in terms of required obtuse solutions.

I really doubt I could ever come up with obtuse puzzle of that caliber.

Buckwheat I have to ask, is this story around to fuel your secret blind-cripple fetish needs?

>>98334
You know what, I'm curious about this now as well.
Buckwheat we must know, are you a blind crip fetishist?

Might be a few more days with no updates. Been busy and haven't been feeling too well lately.

More opinions needed, is the blue text for when Oscar talks a little annoying or is it okay?
Also, am I doing a better job at providing more interesting "prompts" at the end of each page for everyone?

>>98650
The blue text is kind of nice. Makes me feel like Oscar is going to become an important character though...

>>98650
The white text was pretty hard to read.

Crazy conspiracy theory here but, what if Oscar is the one who keeps cursing Rainy every night? What if Candy's been compromised and is working with Tybalt to bring Rainy under?

Small news update thing? Buckwheat 2016/04/19(Tue)14:27 No. 99281 ID: 15a025
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With Volume 2 of Blind Quest finished I'm thinking of taking a short break from writing it to re-think things over a little and try to polish up my skills a bit. I'd love to hear some feedback again while I do this. To be a little more specific, stuff like why do you like/hate the quest/what makes it interesting to you?, what do you feel are the story's weak points? Or maybe these are all just the bad questions to be asking and I should just shut up and keep working away at things?
pic not really related to anything, just testing out what I can do with paint.net for special effects and stuff.

>>99417
Pick some other quests to shit on, too, please.

Is the story really that bad? ;_;

>>99427
It's just been the one guy.

>>99446
You realize quest authors don't get magic post deletion powers. Your posts are being removed, by mods, because your conduct breaks site rules.

I really feel like a stat page or another inventory check would help out right now. Also a more in depth explanation of how magic/enchantments and mages/sages would help out as well.

Crazy theory time? Crazy theory time.
I've got a feeling Don might have something to do with all the cursing going on lately. I mean come on, he's a powerful and trusted person that's CURSED. For all we know Buddy and Ronda are going to come back with him and they'll be cursed as well.

Rainy X Oscar is my new OTP.

Thinking about maybe doing another intermission thread. If I did, who would you like the MC be?

http://www.strawpoll.me/10559318

>>100662
Can we vote to not have an intermission?

>>100699
If want to, sure.

Going to be taking a small break from working on Blind Quest and focusing more on Cheese Louise and Pepsi-Man.

In the mean time, some feedback on blind quest here would be very appreciated. I feel like my writing here is starting to get progressively worse. Any advice on you feel I could improve the quest would be extremely appreciated.

Sorry for the small bump this as well
Also, should I just have a general discussion thread for all my quests instead of having one for each of them?

>>103741
Get better at your art.

>>103741
I think the weirdest part might be the particular tenacity / relentlessness of the opposition. Even when we go out of our way to try and disable them, even we we put ourselves in situations where it should be crazy difficult or impossible for them to attack us... they do.

It feels a little like... scripted encounters in a video game? Yeah, Trish is still gonna show up for a fight now, even if you just chased her down and beat her up. That was a random encounter miniboss, not plot relevant. It makes it feel a little bit like our choices don't have an impact.

It's not bad enough to the point where it's game breaking, and there has been lampshading hanging to mitigate it, but if you were looking for a place to improve your writing, I'd say that would be one place to think on. Making enemies more believable. Or maybe more reactive would be a better way of saying it. Circumstances don't seem to affect them.

>>103772
This. Give Rainy and friends a chance to actually relax for more than 5 minutes without getting attacked!

Also, Don is too much of an asshole. Sure, it's ok the first time cause he was corrupted, but after that, him continuing to be an asshole to Rainy for no reason is just wrong. His attitude right now is, "I don't care if you saved me, I hate you for no reason! And I hate your ideas for reasons I'm not going to explain because we should always do things my way!" when his attitude should be, "Thank you for saving me." and "I don't agree with your plan, let me give advice on what I think we should do, but I'll still respect your decision if you think I'm wrong and explain why."

>>103772
>>103773
Thank you both very much for the feedback! Hopefully the story will start to get better and more interesting now that I have a better idea of what I need to work on and where I need to improve.

1 Year Aniversery Thank you. Buckwheat 2016/10/26(Wed)11:08 No. 104935 ID: 15a025
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So wow, I can't believe that today marks the one year anniversary of Blind Quest. I find it a little hard to believe that I've been writing such an insane sounding story like this for a year now. I really don't know what say honestly. One thing I do know is, I couldn't have made it this far without all your help spooky guide spirits!

Looking back at the beginning I can see I've improved my writing a bit. I also see there's still room for improvement as well, and I'm excited to see how I'll use that room to improve over time. A serious thanks to everyone who's helped out a gave me feedback. This might sound a little corny, but you've been spooky guides for more than just a blind deer with a robot arm, you've also been guiding the person who was crazy enough to run this whacky adventure as well. If it wasn't for you, I don't think this story would be where it is right now. For that, I really can't thank you all enough.

It's been one hell of journey so far (and hopefully and enjoyable one as well). I look forward to making it to the with end all of you, my spooky buddies.

Hooray for year one of this fun quest! =3

Anonymous 2016/11/26(Sat)10:23 No. 105938 ID: 3abd97
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Pulled out a frame from the gif here
>>/quest/761527
for reference.

Merry Christmas Special 1/2 Buckwheat 2016/12/24(Sat)17:53 No. 106853 ID: 15a025
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Rainy: "This sweater feels warm and cozy Candy! I love it!"
Candy: "I'm glad you like it Rainy. This time I promise there's no goofy sayings on this one."
Rainy: "You know, this sweater feels kind of familiar. What's it made out of?"
Candy: "It's made out wo- I mean cotton. It's a cotton sweater."
Rainy: "Heheh. You can't fool me Candy. It's a wool sweater isn't it?"
Candy: "Ah looks like you got me. I made it myself."
Rainy: "Alright, now it's your turn!"

2/2 Buckwheat 2016/12/24(Sat)17:54 No. 106854 ID: 15a025
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Candy: "It's an adorable peppermint tea kettle!"
Rainy: "There's some peppermint tea inside it as well."
Candy: "Rainy..."
Rainy: "Yes?"
Candy: "These are packets of sugar."
Rainy: "Oh Candy I'm sorry. I must have mixed them up somehow."
Candy: "Ah it's fine. I like my tea super sweet anyway. Should last me about...three cups."
Rainy: "Heheh. I'm glad you like it."
Candy: "I love it! Thank you so much!"
Rainy: "And thanks for the sweater, I love how it feels."
Both: "Merry Christmas!"

>>106853
>I made it myself.
I wouldn't be surprised if she also made it from herself also. As in, she used her own wool!

how do you mix up sugar packets as tea bags?

Just a heads up, I'm going to be taking a break from blind quest for a bit. College is kicking my butt here.

How come this takes you so long to update?

>>110377
Look at the post right above yours, my friend. College can be busy busy, even without the rest of life. Remember, patience is a virtue.

Is Trish just talking out of her ass about Jill going out with Cyril? I thought we turned him into a ghost a few threads back?

Haven't had a good spot to really post them all in a nice list, so here's everyone's enchantments so far:

Rainy:
Life Detect
Radar vision (with magic field scanner)
Earth Spikes
Guide Spirits

Don:
Fire Reflect
Explosion Reflect

Ronda:
Magnet Wings
Summon: Chipmunk Spirit
Transform: Stone Statue
Magic Heal
Earth Spikes

Jill:
Holy Arrow
Holy Bell Chimes
Holy Shield
Dispel

Ashley:
Holy shield
Mute
Razor Wind

Oscar:
Water Shield
Freeze
Water temp. Control
Ice Shards
Chaotic Weather

JiggyDino 2017/08/25(Fri)11:44 No. 114821 ID: ca0e20
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To celebrate the quest being completed!

Background is random cause I didn't know what else to do.

>>114821
Aaah it's adorable! Thank you Jiggy!

>>114821
It's a miracle! She magically regrew her right arm and doesn't need a robot arm anymore!

>>114832
Doesn't she have a lifelike version?

>>114835
*insert shoulder shrug here*