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223643 No. 223643 ID: f55a21

#there is

too much noise

it is wrong


it must begin again#

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No. 223644 ID: f55a21
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#all consumed but three

three that are but with

minor flaws

which to correct

which to begin again with

there is not much time#

No. 223647 ID: 97cb33

green means go. so let's go with green.
No. 223648 ID: a594b9

No. 223649 ID: 8bdb6a

Are you the light blue, the dark blue, or the black part?
No. 223650 ID: d560d6

Yellow, the colour of intellect and road signs.
No. 223656 ID: 0e5956

Red, the color of delicious alcohol.
No. 223661 ID: 059120

All three. Work efficiently.
No. 223676 ID: f55a21
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#the red the yellow consumed

the green to begin again

one defect

one survivor

one more to repair#

"Please! No! I want to live! Whatever you are! I'm sorry for whatever it is I've done! Why is this happening?!"

#the noise

is sickening

it must be repaired

it must be congruent

there is little time

what shall be done#

No. 223679 ID: d560d6

Repair it.

No. 223680 ID: 97cb33

it fears you simply because it does not know the truth. repair it.
No. 223682 ID: d677cc

No. 223683 ID: e40e60

What is that thing?
No. 223684 ID: 0b2a05

Stop. Isolate the sickening. Do not destroy it, it must be studied.
No. 223685 ID: dad664
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Isolate. Detain. Upgrade. Hostile elements will be deleted, cooperation will be rewarded.
No. 224090 ID: f55a21
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#congruence requires all

or nothing

if there is no destruction

there is an alternative#

-you will have-
-one more chance-
-to try again-
-live well-
-act well-
-and your kind will live again-

"Deity, I do not know if I can do this, there is no other here, I do not know what to do-"

-else your kind -
-and yourself-
-will face oblivion-
-for eternity-

#is the work here finished

is it time to create anew

or to improve this new origin point

time is running out

there is still much to be done#

No. 224104 ID: d677cc

Uhhhhhhh "improve this new origin point" sounds... the least... something. Go with that one.
No. 224105 ID: f202ec

obviously it's time to start doing the things which must be done
No. 224110 ID: 0b2a05

Congruence is a matter of perception. If things do not appear congruent, it may well be you that requires repair... or destruction.
No. 224142 ID: f55a21
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#this world shall be the origin point

this shall be the new template

the seeds are scattered across the fabric

only this world has thought

others will soon have life

if the remnant can care for its own

its kind will be recreated

and they will thrive

but to keep the stability of one kind

or to aspire to the harmony of creating another kind

and to hope that the harmony does not once again become noise#

No. 224149 ID: a594b9

...it would be cruel to leave only one thinking species in the entire cosmos. Alone, forever...? No. We must make another.

It would help if the second kind had potential to have a symbiotic relationship with the green creature. They would always have a reason to live in harmony this way.
No. 224166 ID: d677cc

I like it.
No. 224539 ID: f55a21
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#another kind is formed

seeded on a world far away

for generations they will dream of one another

they will dream of peace

of symbiosis

of a greater union

they will dream of a single world

and they shall strive to reach it to find one another

the green kind has not disappointed

they are renewed

now to introduce further kinds

or to wait until the existing have grown#

No. 224543 ID: d677cc


Well, if you create more kinds now, you're opening up more potential for conflict.

But if you create more kinds later, you're opening up potential for worse conflict later if they decide that the older kinds are superior to the new ones. A conundrum indeed.
No. 224591 ID: 059120

Then just don't introduce more later. Problem solved. We don't have time for that, anyway.
No. 224616 ID: 4531bc

Make so many different kinds that it'll be impossible to distinguish between them and thus, no conflict.
No. 224631 ID: f55a21
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#no further kinds are created

only these two exist

they prosper and thrive and spread

there is little time

to observe this from afar

or to intervene and ensure peace

by any means necessary#

No. 224632 ID: d560d6

No, that won't do. Shuffle those up a bit so they're all intermingled.
No. 224670 ID: 56dc25

Trust in your accomplishments so far, that when they meet things will go as planned. Let them encounter one another naturally.
No. 224840 ID: 96f818

Agreed, this template is not symmetric; it is not homogeneous; it is not beautiful. Repair it.
No. 224935 ID: f57857

Leave them be, they should mingle amongst themselves naturally.
You gave them a second chance after they embraced utter chaos;
they have not forgotten your mercy.
No. 224955 ID: f55a21
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#they are allowed to meet

without intervention or interference

they are euphoric

to meet those they had only known in dreams for many years

there is melancholy

for those who had not lived to see their soul companions

and there is celebration

as a new alliance is forged

one kind greeting the other with open arms

looking to the stars

and yet

they perhaps pose a threat

alone they were powerless but together

the harmony is too strong

what can be done#

No. 224958 ID: a594b9

What, you're complaining that your creations are getting along TOO well and they might decide to turn against their creator because... why exactly would they do that?

Fine if you want to weaken them so that they can't fuck you over, introduce a third race to do war with them WAIT you don't want that do you.

If you want to be sure they can never be strong enough to strike at you... Put a soft cap on their population. The symbiotic dream connection thing... make it degrade if there's too many alive... so that new births slow/stop after a certain number is reached.
No. 224964 ID: d677cc

Okay, sure, if you want to be paranoid, I guess I can't stop you. But I mean, seriously, you've given them life and peace; I can't see why they would want to "pose a threat." :v
No. 225011 ID: f55a21
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#too simple

too passive

they lament

they want to grow

too perfect

destroy worlds

and they regrow

they cry they lament they scream in their terror

the noise

it is vexing

must it begin again so soon#

No. 225016 ID: a594b9

What the hell are you doing? Stop it! What the hell do you want anyway? You're just lashing out at them for no reason.

Just go away. They don't need you.
No. 225018 ID: a594b9

...look, if they want to grow so badly that they cry out which bothers you which makes you destroy worlds, then... Let it be possible to overcome the cap if they try hard enough.

Introduce a third race. One that naturally creates a resource on their worlds which enhances are rejuvenates the dreamlink. However, their presence on worlds interferes with the dreamlink, so that the three races must constantly move around and shuffle about to enable all three to grow. For added insurance, have the green/red dreamlink presence create resources that the third race can use to grow faster as well.

A different kind of symbiosis. One that requires separation, yet cooperation.
No. 225021 ID: 0b2a05

...That is a really cool idea, do that!
No. 225025 ID: d677cc

You can't make more space? I mean, if you're a real demiurge, I think you have as much space to work with as you feel like working with.

But if that's not what you want to do for whatever reason, then >>225018 is a cool idea.
No. 225026 ID: e40e60

Randomly attacking its creations...

Ladies and gentlemen, I believe we have just created ourselves a villain.
No. 225053 ID: a594b9

Further details: Make the residue/resources like... dream/antidream crystals. As either red+green or the Third Color (or maybe you could make a second pair of colors?) lives on a planet, the crystals build up and eventually stifle their unique growth, so they basically have to move on to new planets. Then the other guys move onto that planet and use the crystals left by the other guys. Eventually they too will build up their own and have to move on...

This switching always continues; a perfect equilibrium. Constantly moving, no reason for either race to wipe out or wage war on the other. It is in their best interests to cooperate yet live separately.

Chaotic harmony. What more could you ask for?
No. 225059 ID: f57857

Perhaps there is a way to sever the link between you and your creations?
Is it within your power to silence the noise without altering the source?

Perhaps it is not truly noise?
Maybe they only yearn for your acknowledgment and love.
They are both ugly and beautiful because they believe trying to be like you will make you proud;
it is innocent, but sinister- they do not know the dangers of such power.
However, perhaps it is not too late for this template.
A third race, one which is stunted by simplicity, but blessed with your wisdom;
may they act as guides for the Green and the Red.
No. 225080 ID: 4531bc


No. 225325 ID: f55a21
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#a third is created

they weaken the dream but are accepted

without hesitation or fear

and respond in kind

they balance

and grow

and grow

and it can not be tolerated

there are too many of them

too many voices

the harmony and the noise alone are unbearable

and together are painful


nothing will work


No. 225326 ID: f55a21
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#there is

too much noise

and too much harmony

both are wrong

sound is wrong

it must begin again

with no thought

but I alone

for all eternity#

No. 225328 ID: a594b9

I hate crazy gods.
No. 225341 ID: f57857
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I must compliment you for this work. It is a different take; an intriguing yet sinister tale.
I wonder if the cycle of creation and destruction you created will continue perpetually or one day finally end through a great upheaval.
Your quest brought forth many philosophical ramifications for this anon, and you were able spin a story both hopeful and defeatist while being true to the quest's namesake.
It has been a pleasant surprise to chance upon this piece here, of all places.
So, umm good job man.
No. 225342 ID: f57857

But I have to add, that it's not really a 'quest.' Still, I liked it.
No. 225351 ID: 0b2a05

This guy is a dick. Would not conscript to build a world again.
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